The "First" Doctor's Visit

Good Start!

Hey BetsyMom, Great start! Keep going and let's get more of what happened. You might want to add some more descriptive details if you get the chance.

Thanks Jackflash1959 (here on lit) or email: jackflash1959@yahoo.com

Hot

Nice I enjoyed the story.
I would have liked if the mother would have been more involved though.

BULLSHIT

BS.----- MS.------- PHD.

Bravo

Very promising start. Please continue and thank you.

I personally like some realism

I know there are too many different kind of people in this world to say such things would never happen; but the odds are I would say it's unlikely. However, being that we all agree that incest does occur, there are situations are very believable, and the more believable the situation is, the more I enjoy the story. However, this story was really on the side of "give me a break" type of story. Not badly written, just more like a fairy tale and a bit short.

Hard on city

Loved this. Keep writing! I so wanted to be the doc and would have stuffed this hardon into your hot wet pussy just after your orgasm and fucked you to the next as your hot nurse mom climbed up and sat on your sexy face.

Hard on city

Loved this. Keep writing! I so wanted to be the doc and would have stuffed this hardon into your hot wet pussy just after your orgasm and fucked you to the next as your hot nurse mom climbed up and sat on your sexy face.

Great Start!

Looking forward to more of your work. That was a short yet very hot story.

O-Kay...

Nice start here with a bit of a 'short one'. If this IS your first story...it shows that you have a lot of promise in your writing. Take your time, don't try and rush things...just go with the flow; it will all work out just fine for you.

Short but Good

I agree that it could have been more descriptive, but it is a very good start on what could be an excellent story. Keep going and don't worry about the naysayers; this isn't going to be a story by Faulkner.

Wow,

that was a HOT little story... poor girl must have wondered what on earth was happening.

Delightfully naughty debut!

Not quite what I expected, but deliciously and surprisingly naughty as you juxtaposed both clinical and erotic descriptions of the situation! I am certainly looking forward to the next! Well done!

Feeling It!!!

I enjoyed ur story. Don't listen 2 the person who's feedback title was bullshit. If he/she didn't like it, then he/she should've went 2 another story. There was no need 4 that negative response! Don't be discouraged! Ignore ignorance! Keep writing! Let me know when u submit ur next one, please. My e-mail address is ajadsc@gmail.com

Sexy Hot

Looking forward to what happens when Mother and Daughter get home.

1st exam when ur 18?

the story had some good points but u need to refine a little, also i cant imagine it is custom in the states to have ur first female doctors exam at the age of 18? on the other hand that explains certain things too...

getting turn on while having both the doctor and mom make you orgasm.

brilliant first story. now you have broken the ice with this very excitning.
story and you have had i long brake how about another part of this one. if i say please.

Where's chapter 2?

Good story but where is the sequel?

great!

You need to hurry and write the next one. It was so hot to read. But next time the doc needs to pop her cherry. While mom holds her hands. THat is hot!!!!

I really like your story. I must say I was hoping there would be more happening between you and your mother. Can't wait to read what happened after you two arrived at home
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Very interesting, it almost sounds like a play.