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sweet
i like the beginning.the story looks promising.
develop it well and it will an amazing story.
all the best !
Great beginning!!!
"SWEET" should have given you a "100"! Good speed and makes the reader want more, alot more! KEEP WRITING!
NOT SO BAD
the 1st paragraph was really unclear. It confused me abit. From the story I can tell that there was a lot of anguish, am i right?
The story is okay in a way but it should be more detailed. Like what happened between Alex and Angie?? What screwed up the relationship and such.How did they meet again and how did Alex take Angie back? Who made the move??
To write a romance story, its about passion and how two people came to be soul mates, its not only about sex.
There is a lot of room for improvement ^^
A good start to a possible series of stories
For a first time writer, this was good. Not great, but good. A story with a difference. Yes, it could become the first of a series, but how exactly to develop it? This would have to be handled carefully. But, as has already been said, what was their background? How old were they exactly 3 years ago? What anguish exactly did they cause each other previously? The raw feeling from Alex was touching, which for me was the essence of the story. YES, DO KEEP WRITING!!
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