I could not finsh this story due to all of the errors. They were just too distracting
by
Anonymous12/04/08
spelling does count
spell check much?
It was a good story but all the spelling and grammer mistakes made it hard to stay 'in the story'.
Keep on writing just get an editor
by
Anonymous12/04/08
IMPOSSIBLE To Read!
As per the previous comments, this is unreadable, due to the numerous errors.
There is hope for this, and future writings, if you try working with one of the volunteer Lit editors. If you don't want to do that, I'd suggest you give up now.
He should explain to his girl and her mother, that he expects the relationship to continue all year long. If he works it right he will have a very good life, giving the two women all of the sex they can handle. That would be a great Christmas present. Thanks for the good fantasy,,,,Rich
by
Anonymous12/04/08
Irony
Not that I'm disagreeing with the comment about spelling and "grammer" but I gotta say, if you're going to criticise someone's need for a spell check, be sure you're spelling correctly yourself.
English
Get an editor
I could not finsh this story due to all of the errors. They were just too distracting
spelling does count
spell check much?
It was a good story but all the spelling and grammer mistakes made it hard to stay 'in the story'.
Keep on writing just get an editor
IMPOSSIBLE To Read!
As per the previous comments, this is unreadable, due to the numerous errors.
There is hope for this, and future writings, if you try working with one of the volunteer Lit editors. If you don't want to do that, I'd suggest you give up now.
That is a Christmas gift
and have they kept on giving, like they promised - and not just at Christmas?
What they said.
The plot was different enough to rate a 50 but the lack of good writing and the bad spelling was a definite negative.
Tell them that you expect it all year long now
He should explain to his girl and her mother, that he expects the relationship to continue all year long. If he works it right he will have a very good life, giving the two women all of the sex they can handle. That would be a great Christmas present. Thanks for the good fantasy,,,,Rich
Irony
Not that I'm disagreeing with the comment about spelling and "grammer" but I gotta say, if you're going to criticise someone's need for a spell check, be sure you're spelling correctly yourself.
Echoing the need for an editor
and the need for more development of "what led to this" and "What happens after Christmas"? All that and I liked it.
Thanks.
very poor writing
lots of typos, no understanding of paragraph divisions
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