Looking at the story initially, I thought that it was going to be too long, but after reading it in its entirety, I realize that I was terribly mistaken. The lead up was truly needed, and I think that it was very believable overall. Super erotic as well. I just wish that more stories form this genre were written as well. My favorite incest stories run more along the maternal end, but this one was fantastic.
Really enjoyed this story and especially the long build-up to their ultimate sex act. I also appreciate that the author submitted this story in its entirety rather than in multiple parts.
Excellent story. Well written and very carefully developed. I had this fantasy growing up although I didn't have a sister. It would have been cool to have an older sister to teach me about sex. Other than the slip with Susan/Maryanne early on, it was a fun and highly entertaining story. Looking forward to more!
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Anonymous12/10/08
A masterpiece
Perhaps the best I've ever read in this genre. Congratulations! Pieater
...it was beginning to feel like she was having second thoughts about her husband. I was almost hoping for that too.
Excellent story. I often skip six pagers (which is partly why I try to avoid writing them) but I've read some of your stuff before so I had a feeling this one would be worth it. It was.
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Anonymous12/10/08
Glad
I'm not the poor dumb cockold hubbie overseas fighting while my loving wife is home fucking her brother, till dad joins them. nice.
I think the love between the brother and sister was predominately the true focus of the story.I will have to say that the sex between the couple was extraordinarily explicit, and very exciting. The story made me want to see the two loving people have sex and discover that they were really meant for each other. Thanks for the excellent story ......Rich
Yeah, right. Quite the opposite; you couldn't get much better without killing Mark off, getting her pregnant, and having them move somewhere anonymously, "role-playing" as husband and wife! That, my friends, minus the grammar, spelling, and punctuation issues, is worthy of a story in any incest-related sex publication! Fiction or not! All that it's missing is the porn-facial! Oddly, my security code for this post was 9111 (or 9/11/01)! Honest!
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Anonymous12/11/08
outstanding
the build-up was perfect
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Anonymous12/12/08
Excellent
Great, great story. The build up was awesome, well drawn out and the scenes were very hot. One of the best stories I've read in a long time.
I was stuck on the concept at once, and I knew I was in for a doozy after having read your whopping four-part mind-control themed story.
From conception to execution, a very well planned-out and organized piece. I, too, was leary about the present-tense style, but I rarely see it, and you pulled it off well.
As usual you bring everything to the table. I look forward to reading your stories. It seems about every three months, so I know when to come around. I certainly wish you could get them out quicker, but I wouldn't want to mess with your style and your strengths. Excellent!!!!
Your stories never disappoint, and this one didn't either. It definitely sound set up to have a sequel or two, and if so, I know I'll read them. Personally, there are series' that I prefer, and this story will likely fade from any spotlight it has, but it was a good story nonetheless.
Personally, I can't wait to read your next Neuro submission story (assuming there will be one, right?).
Happy days.
Very nice story, but for 5 stars you have to continue this story, her brother must cums inside her without any birth control... he have to get his own sister pregnant of his child!
He loves her, he wants her become his child's mother. And she wanna be mother of her brother's children. They become lovers, he cums inside her every time is possible, and as soon as possible she gets pregnant of her brother's child.
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Anonymous04/13/09
110% up to SSlam standards
Just the perfect amount of buildup, suggestiveness, etc....To me, the buildup is the most important part of the story, if i just want sex i can go to any old porn site, but foran involving story that not only draws you in but ....well, you know. Keep up the good work, aand shame on you, the people who posted less than 100%'s. this deeserves to be in the top 10, its much better than many on the top list.
I'm not sure if this is the best story I've read; I'd have to read the stories back-to-back , and I'm not sure what the other contenders are. This is certainly worth more than a "5". As most other readers, I hope you will continue the story. I don't care for the pregnancy angle; I HOPE you can pass on the anal sex [I find it disgusting]. I really liked when he came in her mouth and she held it so he, and the camera, could see her mouth full of cum, and then watch her swallow it. You've got foreshadowing for her to leave Mark, based on what he's asking her to do in the videos. In fact, you have so many things you could do that you could make a novel of this, and I think most of your readers would thank you. So I'll start now and thank you for what you've written and what I hope you will write in the future.
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Anonymous05/24/09
This story reads Damned good...
Better than 110%... Maby another chapter with what she teaches him and if they call an end to it when Mark gets home, I would seriously hope that they make time for each other...
From go to whoa this was a fantastic story. Believable characters and a nice long story with substance. Exceptional work samslam. I just wish I could write this well.
So very, very good. I never had a sister, so I grew up being deprived and poorly educated. Now that I am in my second childhood, I shall endeavor to get my masters' degree. Thank you for stirring my fantasies.
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Anonymous07/21/09
Of the best
Amazing. It was just what I was looking for. Just enough detail. Dude below is right; I could go to any old porn site to see naked chicks. Its all about the build up and you Used enough detail so I could picture the whole thing in my head.
Great job I will definatley be looking into more of your stories.
This one takes careful character development to get to the BOILING HOT JUICY SEX Little Bro is needing -- as is his horny grass widow sister. Both have solid respect for each other, so we are in for a tantalizing ride. By the time her young husband gets back from Iraq, we're going to have to get another girl's bed & bod for the boy. Excellent storytelling!
Great build-up, I loved the change of pace as the sister decided to go with her gut and I had the most wonderful laugh as I skipped a line accidentally, which resulted in her telling him that he will become an extraordinarily talented cockhead... :-P
That's one bedtime story I'll read over and over again.
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Anonymous09/16/09
Brilliant!!!
Completly! Utterly! Absolutly! Undoubtably! By Far! The best on Literotica!!! Loved the way you wrote it and the plot was fantastic! Great way to "write" or lay out the story. Your by far the best author I've seen since I've been reading on Literotica, which is been quite awhile. Please, Please, Please write a continuation!!! I'm begging you!!!!!!
What better than every teenager's fantasy of having sex every night? Interesting, no unique, plot line. Too bad so many of our GIs are overseas and not able to share sex with their wives. A great story!
This is a masterful romantic romp -- absolutely super, juicy, hot, loving sex! The plot is well designed and wonderfully described. It also shows how badly we treat our young people by sending them into distant, drawn-out wars. Man oh man, but a gorgeous young woman on the prowl can set real fires! Her brother is learning a ton, so I hope he'll be able transition into a solid, loving, passionate marriage and leave his big sis to her ;ife's love when he gets home.
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Anonymous12/18/09
WOW
ONLY TWO THINGS I CAN SAY ABOUT THIS IS "WOW" AND "HOT"
I AM AWAITING MORE
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Anonymous12/25/09
Put her on the pill....speed up the time (a year or two later) and then put Mark on a second tour of duty.
English
Terrific
Most long stories such as this get boring, but this one didn't. Great job.
Montgomery Burns says, "Ex-cell-ent!"
Good job, well done!!!
Great Story
One of the best stories I've read ever !!!!
Accidents happen
Birth control is not 100%...You should continue with brother getting his sister pregnant!
Nice lead up well done
Very well done. Kept me on edge the whole time. A little mystery, common sense and the sex was great. Nice job
Fantastic Story
Looking at the story initially, I thought that it was going to be too long, but after reading it in its entirety, I realize that I was terribly mistaken. The lead up was truly needed, and I think that it was very believable overall. Super erotic as well. I just wish that more stories form this genre were written as well. My favorite incest stories run more along the maternal end, but this one was fantastic.
Very Well Done
Really enjoyed this story and especially the long build-up to their ultimate sex act. I also appreciate that the author submitted this story in its entirety rather than in multiple parts.
Well done!
Excellent story. Well written and very carefully developed. I had this fantasy growing up although I didn't have a sister. It would have been cool to have an older sister to teach me about sex. Other than the slip with Susan/Maryanne early on, it was a fun and highly entertaining story. Looking forward to more!
A masterpiece
Perhaps the best I've ever read in this genre. Congratulations! Pieater
Loved it. Towards the end there...
...it was beginning to feel like she was having second thoughts about her husband. I was almost hoping for that too.
Excellent story. I often skip six pagers (which is partly why I try to avoid writing them) but I've read some of your stuff before so I had a feeling this one would be worth it. It was.
Glad
I'm not the poor dumb cockold hubbie overseas fighting while my loving wife is home fucking her brother, till dad joins them. nice.
a very interesting escapade and love affair
I think the love between the brother and sister was predominately the true focus of the story.I will have to say that the sex between the couple was extraordinarily explicit, and very exciting. The story made me want to see the two loving people have sex and discover that they were really meant for each other. Thanks for the excellent story ......Rich
This sucked!
Yeah, right. Quite the opposite; you couldn't get much better without killing Mark off, getting her pregnant, and having them move somewhere anonymously, "role-playing" as husband and wife! That, my friends, minus the grammar, spelling, and punctuation issues, is worthy of a story in any incest-related sex publication! Fiction or not! All that it's missing is the porn-facial! Oddly, my security code for this post was 9111 (or 9/11/01)! Honest!
outstanding
the build-up was perfect
Excellent
Great, great story. The build up was awesome, well drawn out and the scenes were very hot. One of the best stories I've read in a long time.
not bad.
it was okay. nothing special but a good read.
Hot AND romantic
Hey GLAD........it was the "poor dumb cockold hubbies" idea, remember? You must have been an only child, or did your sister reject you?
Nice Tale
It was a nice story, just didn't enjoy the present tense. It makes stories clumsy, although not enough to make me stop reading this one. Good job!t
SSlam strikes again!
I was stuck on the concept at once, and I knew I was in for a doozy after having read your whopping four-part mind-control themed story.
From conception to execution, a very well planned-out and organized piece. I, too, was leary about the present-tense style, but I rarely see it, and you pulled it off well.
All in all, very well done.
muy excelente!!!
As usual you bring everything to the table. I look forward to reading your stories. It seems about every three months, so I know when to come around. I certainly wish you could get them out quicker, but I wouldn't want to mess with your style and your strengths. Excellent!!!!
Another great addition
Your stories never disappoint, and this one didn't either. It definitely sound set up to have a sequel or two, and if so, I know I'll read them. Personally, there are series' that I prefer, and this story will likely fade from any spotlight it has, but it was a good story nonetheless.
Personally, I can't wait to read your next Neuro submission story (assuming there will be one, right?).
Happy days.
Awful!
Just awful!
The are not enough superlatives...
to tell how really good this story was!
Very nice story
Very nice story, but for 5 stars you have to continue this story, her brother must cums inside her without any birth control... he have to get his own sister pregnant of his child!
He loves her, he wants her become his child's mother. And she wanna be mother of her brother's children. They become lovers, he cums inside her every time is possible, and as soon as possible she gets pregnant of her brother's child.
110% up to SSlam standards
Just the perfect amount of buildup, suggestiveness, etc....To me, the buildup is the most important part of the story, if i just want sex i can go to any old porn site, but foran involving story that not only draws you in but ....well, you know. Keep up the good work, aand shame on you, the people who posted less than 100%'s. this deeserves to be in the top 10, its much better than many on the top list.
Don't know what to say
I'm not sure if this is the best story I've read; I'd have to read the stories back-to-back , and I'm not sure what the other contenders are. This is certainly worth more than a "5". As most other readers, I hope you will continue the story. I don't care for the pregnancy angle; I HOPE you can pass on the anal sex [I find it disgusting]. I really liked when he came in her mouth and she held it so he, and the camera, could see her mouth full of cum, and then watch her swallow it. You've got foreshadowing for her to leave Mark, based on what he's asking her to do in the videos. In fact, you have so many things you could do that you could make a novel of this, and I think most of your readers would thank you. So I'll start now and thank you for what you've written and what I hope you will write in the future.
This story reads Damned good...
Better than 110%... Maby another chapter with what she teaches him and if they call an end to it when Mark gets home, I would seriously hope that they make time for each other...
wham bam, thank you SLAM
ratings should go higher than 5, that seems mediocre, which the story wasn't!!
5 points, 10 hard-on's
encore!
maybe mark gets his dick shot off!!
Frickin awesome!!!!
From go to whoa this was a fantastic story. Believable characters and a nice long story with substance. Exceptional work samslam. I just wish I could write this well.
YES!
So very, very good. I never had a sister, so I grew up being deprived and poorly educated. Now that I am in my second childhood, I shall endeavor to get my masters' degree. Thank you for stirring my fantasies.
Of the best
Amazing. It was just what I was looking for. Just enough detail. Dude below is right; I could go to any old porn site to see naked chicks. Its all about the build up and you Used enough detail so I could picture the whole thing in my head.
Great job I will definatley be looking into more of your stories.
Simply Awesome
Dude...That was an awesome story.
a story with heart
excellent. great build and a sense of people caring about each other.
and the sex was hot.
Sis Loves Me & I'm Hot for Her Sweet Bod
This one takes careful character development to get to the BOILING HOT JUICY SEX Little Bro is needing -- as is his horny grass widow sister. Both have solid respect for each other, so we are in for a tantalizing ride. By the time her young husband gets back from Iraq, we're going to have to get another girl's bed & bod for the boy. Excellent storytelling!
Don't Stop Now
Please don't stop now...it's just now getting really HOT!Please don't leave us hanging.
Wonderful
To use an Army expression "OUTSTANDING". My wife sent me some video downrange... Wish I had someone I could trust to keep the home fires burning.
GREAT story
Wow, that was really a GREAT story i LOVED it.
Wow!
Great build-up, I loved the change of pace as the sister decided to go with her gut and I had the most wonderful laugh as I skipped a line accidentally, which resulted in her telling him that he will become an extraordinarily talented cockhead... :-P
DAMN
Effing magnificent... that's all I can say.
Brilliant
This story was absolutely fantastic.
And the meek shall always win!!!
Putris na yang gagao na yan!kaswerte naman!Translation:Goddam that asshole!what a lucky fuck he is...
Wow, that was insanely good!
That's one bedtime story I'll read over and over again.
Brilliant!!!
Completly! Utterly! Absolutly! Undoubtably! By Far! The best on Literotica!!! Loved the way you wrote it and the plot was fantastic! Great way to "write" or lay out the story. Your by far the best author I've seen since I've been reading on Literotica, which is been quite awhile. Please, Please, Please write a continuation!!! I'm begging you!!!!!!
Jake :) aka. Bunkwadman2
Wonderful
A wonderful erotic story. One of the best I have read.
Really hot
What better than every teenager's fantasy of having sex every night? Interesting, no unique, plot line. Too bad so many of our GIs are overseas and not able to share sex with their wives. A great story!
Oooh wow.
This was amazing! One of the best stories I've read on here by far. I usually don't bother leaving comments, but I just had to. Absolutely amazing!
Wow...
wow... What more can you say to an amazing story like this than... wow! Great story hope to read many more similarly amazing stories.
Home Movies & Home Moves
This is a masterful romantic romp -- absolutely super, juicy, hot, loving sex! The plot is well designed and wonderfully described. It also shows how badly we treat our young people by sending them into distant, drawn-out wars. Man oh man, but a gorgeous young woman on the prowl can set real fires! Her brother is learning a ton, so I hope he'll be able transition into a solid, loving, passionate marriage and leave his big sis to her ;ife's love when he gets home.
WOW
ONLY TWO THINGS I CAN SAY ABOUT THIS IS "WOW" AND "HOT"
I AM AWAITING MORE
Put her on the pill....speed up the time (a year or two later) and then put Mark on a second tour of duty.
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