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Ummm.
I like your stories. I've read several now, and they're entertaining. I do very much wish you knew a high school English teacher that could help you out with spelling and grammar. The errors are sometimes amusing, frequently annoying, and always distracting from the main story.
Nice twist at the end
Lovely happy ending!
Good story
I like a happy ending. I hope he sent a picture of his Son to his ex-wife and her Father along with a note asking her if SHE was sterile? Oh - An editor or better proof reading next time. Nothing major but there were a number of irritating mistakes.
Great story
Loved this story, my only comment would be to fill out your characters a little more. Keep this family going for us, give us both back stories and lead us into a great epilogue. 5x 🌟
again...a great little story
despite the spelling and grammar mistakes...loved the ending...he should have sent a photo to his bitch ex and told her she was the problem not him....brilliant...loved it....
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