i'm so excited to see something new from you! i love your stories, please keep writing. they are intense sweet love stories that touch my heart. thank you.
damn am still wanting more of James and Malcolm....you have to write more......Please,please
I love all your stories and it'a always a nice surprise when you post new stories/chapters. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. I wish there were another chapter for these two guys but i love the story as it is too.
I really enjoyed this journey, but It's not over. I think we would love to know how their relationship develops. What happens to Malcolm's life now that everyone knows he is in a relationship with another man? This story still has much more life to it. Please continue.
its great to see you back writing. the only reason i didn't give this story and 100 is because it seems like its not finished. maybe 1 more chapter might do it...i'm glad to see you back though...don't get me wrong, i loved this chapter, keep up the good work.
Others have already covered the feeling of there is more we wish to see with this story. To me this seems more of a set up for the real story. I hope that is the case. I also want to say this is not just the fact there there is no big repeating love seens for a love story. It seems we only got a taste of the relationship story. If not already please concider a continue of this. I love it and your writing. looking forward to more being made available.
It was pretty cool...kinda awkward that it's actually over though
You can not end this story now! James has been through so much and just as he is recovering, you end it. Not fair! Hope you start something new soon.
I really like your writing and your stories, and I enjoyed this tale very much until the end. I was left with a feeling of disappointment because this chapter hardly dealt with Malcolm and James as a couple. I was hoping to see those two spending time with each other and Malcolm helping James with dealing with the trauma. It seems like you stopped caring about the characters and lost interest in the story and wanted to just write something so it would be done. Comparing it all your other stories I found this one lacking.
You can't leave your story with that ending, it was so sodden. I feel like everyone else, that the ending was missing something, they way it ended it does not feel like your endings, I hope you give us another ending or at least feel in the gaps.
I can't decide if I love or hate this ending. On the one hand its perfectly inevitable but on the other it feels somewhat empty. It is the first time I've ever given one of your stories less than 100% and that is the reason why. It doesn't seem like yourself.
I loved thjis one ^_^ perfect.
I'm so glad you finished it - and I disagree with most of the other comments, I think this ending is perfect! It's sweet and brings everything to a nice close.
I hope you start writing more, you're the only reason I poke my head on this website every once in a while! :)
i loved the whole story but found the ending was just not enough, its too sudden, it just ends it goes nowhere.
I love the president's son series but i feel that this story ended too soon. Or maybe your going to continue it in some other story?
I love this and all ur other stories .I have read them all at least 10 times. Would have loved to see more about James and Malcolm reunion and how they progress from here but loved it nevertheless.
I really hope to SEE MORE STORIES FROM U....U ARE MY FAVOURITE AUTHOR!!!!
this story is clearly more than the author can handle. i like the rest of the author's stories. not this one, though.
While I agree with others that the story ended too soon, I have to say that this is one of the most moving stories I've read. I think that more could've been done with the ending, or even another chapter added that addresses the difficulty that James will have trying to cope with his first time since his ordeal. I look forward to reading more of your stories.
it seems that there are more gaps than just the ending. i feel that the connection with the group and the kidnappers weren't fully developed and the fact that their point??? what the hell was their point?? and did it reach the public and what was their reaction to the public's admiration of James? this story has the makings of a full-fledged novel - just like the bourne identity. i feel that this is just the bare bones of what could be a really good novel-not necessarily with the love story as the forefront since i'm not sure if the kiss was the reason for the kidnapping or the president's liberal views and they just used his son as the convenient tool. yes you mentioned or hinted at this but if the characters themselves...blah blah blah...
i really am not looking for a happy neatly tied up ending, but a clarification on your connections in the story and a little more research. i haven't written a novel so i might be talking out of my butt, but i know you're a good writer and i hope what i'm saying means something.
I really enjoyed the story but I have to say I am sad by how it ended. I agree that the connection between the kidnappers and James wasn't explained well enough. And I am sorry to see that the connection between the two guys wasn't explored more. I think the ending was kind of abrupt as well.
However, as always, it was a very enjoyable read. I love your work and this was no exception.
Amazing story, kept me reading till the end. Keep it up, this was a scorcher.
One of your best stories, but i hope to read more on how the bilt there relation... keep writing
I love your work/ I love your stories. I cannot tell you how much I think you are an amazing writer with a gift. You make truly remarkable stories that are gripping and engaging. This is my favorite story and I can't wait for more.
This is the most heart wrenching story ever! So sad but beautiful ending...wouldn't have minded more action between James and Malcolm at the end though.
I seriously lost track of time. I just had to know what happened. You are an amazing writer! This might be the best story I've read on here.
I loved the whole series from beginning to end. I think the part I loved most was Malcolm being worried and heart broken over James when he was captured. It was powerful. Truly great and very enjoyable!
... maybe a couple years down the road for them? Would really like to see how they turned out.
I love this story sooooo much! It's so compelling and you just get stuck reading it, I agree with the others who have said that this could very easily become a novel length story with a little more filler and explanation, but I cannot express how much I positively ADORE this series! Thanks for sharing, I hope you post more stories soon as I love all of your other works as well! =)
Please tell me this isn't finished. I'm enjoying it too much x
I want to know what else happens for James and Malcolm, please write more chapters this cannot be the end the start of the end of their story when we are still in the beginning of their love and considering what happened i want to know how it truly ends for James and Malcolm???
I know I found this story late, and this issue is now mute, but it is a great story told very well
Man this story is EPIC. Did you know that I actually cried in this story? Wow, the way my heart moved with every words I read........ WoW just WoW! I really love the ending but something is missing. Did you ever feel, eating your favorite food but you can't savor it or should I say enjoy it because you hadn't had enough? That's what I felt! Please. If you are reading this Mr. DWSimon, I'm begging you to continue this EPIC Story of yours. I want to see Alec suffer. I want to witness the romance of Malcolm and James. I want.... I want this story to continue! I am not forcing you but please, for the sake of your awesome fans....
Love Do Conquers All
Why after so many chapters and so much other detail would you not seal this incredible story with a wonderful and touching love making session between these two. We deserved that. I have now read all of your stories. This being the last. I am only sorry that you have not continued to write. Your content is excellent and so overwhelming to read. I won't begin to tell you how many hours I have played hooky to read all your stories. Can you advise if you have other such stories available to read. Possibly under annother pen name or source?
I re-read this today and I have to say I feel the same way reader 08 does. I really wanted to see them move forward in their relationship. I would have liked to see the outcome of the political changes that were sparked. Which of the bad guys were caught? Did the public even know how it (kidnapping) was about more than the kiss? I think you could have taken it a bit further. This piece was so emotional. It was able to get me crying more than once....well pretty much for the whole last quarter. You included alot of details throughout that made it feel more real. I know this is an older piece, and the chance is slim, but i'd love to see you add an epilogue or last chapter answering some of the questions left. keep writing.
Thats it? This story seems so incomplete. What happened to Alec? Did James & Malcolm make love? Did they get married? You are a great writer and I would have never thought you would leave your readers hanging. This need an epilogue or a saga. I'm very disappointed.
I am very disappointed! It's not fair to show us Alec rutting on James, and not show us Malcolm loving on James! I don't care about any of the other stuff...who the others are, whether or not they were caught, what happens to Alec, what happens to James's career...none of that matters to me in the end, even though it was all engaging at the time. I really was just reading it so I could see them back together, fulfilled at last. I am very let down!
I hope this is the story that you will add to and complete. You have never left with an ending like that. We know they love each other, but yes what punishment did Alec get? Did they get and disassemble the renegade group? What future does James have now he is no longer in the Navy? Did Malcolm help push the bill through?? There is still so much more to add... Please complete
I so loved this story, i hope that there are more chapters to come
have never cried like i did when i read your story . Just to think something could come happen like this is so sad. but you did a great job of writing this story. do hope to have more from you thank you John
such a fantastic, exciting, nerve-racking story deserves a different ending !!
1st of all - James and Malcolm - what will become of them, how will they face all the media, how will be James's life now he's not in the Navy anymore ... will they get married ? SAY YES, PLLLZZZ !! Will Malcolm carry on as a Senator ? Will the President carry on in service? Will James have now a fulfilling life, even if he is the son of the President of the US ?
2nd - Those fucking bastards have to be captured - ok they wanted to make a point, the sons of bitches, national security is lax ... whatever ! But they have to be brought to justice, and God willing, to face a firing squad. I hated the patronizing tone the guy in charge used with James the whole time he was being tortured and when they left - "we didn't want to hurt you permanently ... " blah blah blah yuuck !! What's with these little mood changes on the guy's eyes, his half-smiles ... what's with him ?
I'd would also love to read about his interrogation.
3rd - I would love to know how they questioned Alec and what he said; what is James's reaction to what he did to him.
Oh, PLEASE DW do write another chapter. There is still so much to be said !
It was an amazing story, thank you; but it ended to soon, I think. ^_^
NB - The Repeal Act of 2010 is not yet the end of discrimination for gays in the Military; its LGBT members still have a long fight on their hands.
Decided to re-read this....Brilliant all the way through. Thank God that Law is gone. Well thought out. Made a great statement. I just agree that the ending deserved a bit more. I'd have liked him and Malcolm to get together and to see their relationship go a bit farther. I'd have liked to see them do something fun and show they were a bit further down the road of moving forward together. Maybe an epilogue.
overall great story....just a bit disappointed with the end.
great story.amazing.but it was first fun and sweet but it became too awful and scary later to ch-6 .it should have shown more of malcolm and james love,sex,kisses and above all the love and fun between them.situations were too tense and hard.
there was no slight bit of happiness in it all.
so expecting an continuation of this story were everything has calmed down and the situation gone to normal. there should be a few more chapters showing malcolm and james love making in bed and everywhere.showing peoples support and james returning again to the NAVY as captain and also the captivators sent to lifetime imprisonment in guantanamo bay jail near cuba for torturous prisonment.
above all we all want to see a happy and fun ever after for the both loving men.
Hoping you will give that to them happily without no mor sadness, as well to us also,the readers.
waiting for the next few more chapters and not wanting to wait longer.
This story should be made into a movie, it captivated me from the very beginning.
I'm a lot like the First Lady, strong and willful, but the story brought me to tears. The torture was gruesome, the raping angered me, the dishonorable discharge enraged me, but in the end I teared up which is something I don't do easily.
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