All Comments on 'Enter Sandman Ch. 07'

Your writing is good and the story is interesting but your short chapters suck! I will quit reading your story if there is more short chapters like this one.

I am liking the story in and of itself, but you will now get people to read your stories after this one is finished with the chapters being so short.

This is more a long paragraph than a chapter.

If your story was the only story that I read then it would probably make sense to me, but I read about 15 stories a day, and don't have time to go back to refresh myself when the chapter is so short. I start mixing up the previous chapters with other stories that I've read. It's a shame too because your story is good, but I just have to give up on it.Good try though....Rich

writing is good, but longer chapters are needed.

if I like to read something about violence I exactly know where I go looking for ------> literotica, logic no ?

The story is thoroughly entertaining, but really, the chapters are too short. The frequency of posting does help, but just as the reader gets back into the storyline, it's time for "to be continued"....... It's aggravating.

-- KK in Texas

or you're just a fucking moron! You've been told by over 90% of the people who leave a comments that your chapters are WAY TOO SHORT. So what? you're smarter than everyone else? what your readers want doesn't matter? You're a loser who isn't bright enought to take the COLLECTIVE advise and make adjustments. I certainly will not read another posting from you... if you don't respect your writing enough to take a few minutes and read your feedback to improve it, why would I want to waste my time?

If you don't have experience then do some research.

1. NCOs don't "command" anything. Only officers command units.

2. Spec forces aren't organized in squads, they are A teams.

3. 10 years in service is not enough time for anyone to reach the level of A team leaders so Sandman couldn't have led any unit.

4. No SF A team reports directly to a general. Too many layers of command in between.

5. No NCO "argues" tactics with a CG. Hell, damn few COLs would.

6. You still have Sandman at 28 which means he's been a cop for less than a year. This means he hasn't even finished his probationary year much less be a detective.

as long as you only skim. What really need to do is to write out the outline with a calendar and thereby now what would be normal.

He went into special forces? U earn your way in. He could not command any unit no matter how small as he was not an officer.

Why care about his wife's safety when she's cheating on him and pregnant with another guy's baby???? She deserves whatever happens to her.

She is Carrying another man's Child .. I would not care at all . I sure as heck would not sign the Certificate of Birth Papers