I want to see part two in the story. I would like to see how the brother takes care of the sister sexually over the weekend and how the relationship develops between the two of them.
It could have been longer, and they could have moved to the bedroom more gradually, shedding clothes along the way, but very very good!
ps, a couple too many, "rolling the eyes" more than needed for the punch line of her brother noticing her doing it.
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Anonymous12/23/08
Fine start.
I liked your story, you have a nice touch with dialogue and description. I thought everything was a bit rushed and I wonder if you pace them a bit in part two. I will soon know as I see you have posted. Cheers so far. -- UK CYNIC.
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Anonymous12/23/08
Excellent
A brother fucking his sister is cool. Shooting his cum into her womb is even better. Please continue the story. Tell us more about him riding his sister and cuming in her pussy. Excellent reading.
English
Good little tale.
I thoroughly enjoyed your little sibling incest tale. I just wish there had been more of it.
Nice little stroker
Every guy would love a hot little sister to love like Lissy...more, please!
Very Creamie
A beautiful story, well done.
Pls write some more
good story
I enjoy incest stories, especially siblings. Please write more
part two
i submitted a part two last night
it should be up soon
thank you all for the wonderful comments!
Awesome story
Please continue this story!
Wanted A Part Two Of the Story!!!
I want to see part two in the story. I would like to see how the brother takes care of the sister sexually over the weekend and how the relationship develops between the two of them.
Great first submission!
It could have been longer, and they could have moved to the bedroom more gradually, shedding clothes along the way, but very very good!
ps, a couple too many, "rolling the eyes" more than needed for the punch line of her brother noticing her doing it.
Fine start.
I liked your story, you have a nice touch with dialogue and description. I thought everything was a bit rushed and I wonder if you pace them a bit in part two. I will soon know as I see you have posted. Cheers so far. -- UK CYNIC.
Excellent
A brother fucking his sister is cool. Shooting his cum into her womb is even better. Please continue the story. Tell us more about him riding his sister and cuming in her pussy. Excellent reading.
WONDERFUL!!!!
Please add in another chapter!!!
Nice
Please write in the 3rd person next time. That would make it even better. A 3rd person is just you writing about the characters in the story.
hell yh
please write more tht was hot
Hard
You made my dick very hard. Write more.
fantastic
That was good.
Just a shame there wasn't more of it...........
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