Very well written.
Louis L'Amour would approve. Everything you write comes out great. Write whatever form suits your mood!
This is a fine tale and worthy of the song. I look forward to more from you. These invitationals are great, thanks for working so hard.
Candy must have really been pleased to see him all busted up from the MacPherson fight thereby giving her an almost clear field! I liked that you made her explain those initial negative comments!
An excellent story, and from what I can tell, appropriate for the time and place (in terms of passion and sex). A sequel could work, or perhaps just a different story.
-- KK in Texas
I think you should write a sequelto this storie. I alsoo think youshould write other western stories.
I really likes the first three installments, and was looking forward to finding another, and was also comparing you favorably with Louis L'Amour, but you got in a hurry to end it and the last installment was a little lacking
it was a good read. i envy your ability and enjoy your style. keep it up, pal!
Continue on with the western srories. I mostly read only westerns and this was a very enjoyable one.
Yes please gives another part to this great story if this is your first try you did very good I look forward to others and at least a sequel to this one what does Bud do how about Roxie what Happens to the ranch that Colin had there are endless ways for this to continue keep up the good work I really enjoy your writing Larry
I did enjoy your first Western. Thanks!
I grew up with Zane Grey and Luke Short, La mour came later and took my fancy. I don't know if you still write but I would suggest different stories as you basically finished this one. Vey good.
I loved this story, keep up the good work
It may have been your first but it was great - I got the feeling it was all real and happening - not just a tale.
Well done as always - we need more from you - addicts always do - but your are the pusher here heh
i really liked it but i think you put toomuch in too few pages. still very good. yes please on the sequel.
This is the way (Superb) ,Westerns,should be written .I have been reading around (
1,500 to 1,600 books),a year,for the last (10)years.75%,of which have been Westerns.You,have the Gift of Writing Westerns,Keep it coming !!!
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