by ImaFantasy
I started reading because the premise sounded good... But with that horrible accent typed out, I just had to skip to the comments section.
I've read some stuff where within the first few scrolls, I think "Nuh-uh", and exit out. Or I can tell the writing is bad, and again, I just exit out. No rating, no comment. I had to.
I can tell the author is not Southern, and I say that as a Southern person. It reads like a BAD episode of Beverly Hillbillies - The "Jest"s and the "an"s and the "ta"s. Bad. That's not even "cornbread and sweet tea southern", that everyone thinks of from "Sweet Home Alabama". That's just a bad characterization of whatever the heck the author thinks Southern should sound like.
Phew. Maybe rewrite it, but with descriptions of the accents, and name a state? Definitely with emphasis on the wordplay versus really bad accent writing. I'd read it if it was that, cause... Yeesh.
Hand it over to a Southern person. At least.