Should try to write longer stories. Your ideas are good, why not make at least three pages with them ?
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Anonymous12/28/08
Possibly interesting scenario - poorly written
You occasionally come up with what could be an interesting scenario, but ruin it with bad writing. If you must persist:
1. Take some writing courses.
2. You're a black male - try writing from the submissive black male point of view. You're completely unconvincing as a white female.
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Should try to write longer stories. Your ideas are good, why not make at least three pages with them ?
Possibly interesting scenario - poorly written
You occasionally come up with what could be an interesting scenario, but ruin it with bad writing. If you must persist:
1. Take some writing courses.
2. You're a black male - try writing from the submissive black male point of view. You're completely unconvincing as a white female.
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