by Sean Renaud
And we are to assume................what? Did he keep a used whore? Did he tell her not to come home? Did he rip the place apart? Did he go get medical testing? Did he kill her? You just started a stroke story with ending it. Writers that have no ending should not begin to write. It is the mark of a very poor amateur.
You really need to do a sequel on this one. You have left it open to go either direction: if he were appalled, he would not have been so willing to finish himself; and if he were pleased, he would not have spoken to the clerk at the end in the way he did.
really good friends who fuck his wife, nice wife anyway, nice reaction of the husband too. well all in all fucked up fantasy or real world you live in.