Stolen Kisses

Darn

What the?... Oh DARN I fell asleep !.....

Liked it but long

Nice story, but seems a bit contrived and clinical -- and needless to say, is drawn out a bit much. Still I liked it and one can jump to the end and then go back and read the rest.

Great story

Great story and well written, not intended for a quick fix. Keep up the good work.

a fine and stirring tale

Ignore the weaklings PacoFear. You are a fine writer. A paced, well-written, story, building realistically and with intense eroticism. Well done.

Wonderful

Both the story and the writing are excellent; both are rare here. I am amazed at others' comments; maybe brother/sister sex does not ring their bells. The wryly intellectual language was entertaining and refreshing.
As much as you obviously care about writing, I should mention that "...wreak of her arrousal..." and "...taught smooth flesh..." are both incorrect. The words are "reek" and "taut."
A couple of calls from the parents would have brought things back to earth momentarily so that the flights of fancy would be more exhillarating, but that is a minor matter.

great story

i liked it alot. im not into incest, but the story is more than that. and very well written.

Great Story!

Fantastic Story, very well written. You had me captivated the whole way through. Don't listen to the critics, keep writing, you're very good at it. I look forward to a sequel.

A winner, very enjoyable,

I was wondering about a Hero update before I saw this. A fitting sub, like I said very good story. Cheers. -- UK CYNIC

Very nicely done

I loved the buildup, and the culmination of the sister's schemes. Of course, the way she was described, her brother might still have caved if he 'had' been gay.

Outstanding story!

One of the better sibling incest tales I've encountered on this site. Thanks for sharing it.

Exceedingly brilliant

Loved it all the way.

Magnificent

This was hot, tender, romantic....just lovely. Thank you. I loved it!

Thanks for the feedback!

I appreciate the kind words. To Anonymous: thanks for catching the phonetic typos. I end up with them too often because I write by sound. It's one of the reasons I end up with my own peculiar little goofy rhythm. (My friends tease me that they can spot my writing in 2 paragraphs.) I missed the typos this time because I did a descriptive re-write after my last edit and never edited again. Dumb. To UK CYNIC: I promise I haven't forgotten you (or the other folks reading Hero's Life). I'm writing the next three chapters all together. Let's just say you'll love me, then you'll hate me, then you'll love me again. To all: one question I'll throw out to anybody who feels like answering - was anyone surprised that Jessica turns out to be a virgin? The half-dozen friends who read it were evenly divided on "totally obvious" and "never saw it coming." Just curious how you guys break down. Thanks again gang!

Excellent

I seriously can't remember the last time I read a story like this, good job. What are the chances of a sequel?

Very good story

It was well paced, nice details, believable. Thanks

loved it ...

very beautiful, loved your story..

Best luck!

Thanks,
Sunny

One and done methinks

To RedDevil: Never say "never" but I wanted this as one tight self-contained thing. I'm juggling my original multi-chapter monster right now.

re PF -- A definite virgin

I thought that and after checking the opening I assumed she would want him first. The mention of a lack of any recent boyfriend was a factor too. Re the previous anon comment I actually thought he summed up the plot pretty well, just a pity he didnt seem to like it. Dont know what else was expected from an incest story? Glad to hear about your Hero plans. Cheers. -- UK CYNIC

Well done!

I'm not usually into incest but I enjoyed this story. I really liked the relationship they had and the stolen kisses game. Definitely knew she was a virgin from their first encounter when she wouldn't let him move his fingers. I was surprised that she didn't want him to break her in, though. In an intimate story like this, it was slightly jarring and distant. Regardless, I liked it. I'm going to have a look at your other stories now.

Hats off

Impressive, dare I say perfect. I agree whole-heartily with your post script assessment. And it worked.

unrealistic

to unrealistic for my tastes no guy would put up with a sister that was constantly teaseing him and hinting he was gay he would get pissed at her tell her to go to hell and find a way to move out or atleast stay away as much as possible and when home stay locked in his room he sure wouldn't ever screw her keep it atleast sounding believable

EXCELLENT!

I enjoyed your story AND the post script as well... I agree with your perspective.

I loved how developed the story is... the deep connection is important in any story or any romance. Thank you for this one.

5/5

liked it? LOVED IT.

incredible

it was lovely piece of writting........
keep it up.........

Wow!

What an amazing bit of writing this is! There are so many wonderful little character details in there, but the story never gets bogged down with them. It flows effortlessly. My only regret is that I can't give it more than 5 stars. I'm very much looking forward to reading the rest of your work.

Really comical.

Kept me laughing.

Stolen Kisses

"Stolen," my ass! They are eagerly given as the sex builds to SUPERMAX HEAT. It's hot sex, but also gentle and truly affectionate, at once deeply honest and craftily deceptive, something brand new and yet based on an entire life of shared experiences, feelings, and endless joshing. ("You're gay." "Oh, yeah, well you are Little Tits, the wannabe slut.") Without the splendidly fabricated banter between the two lovers, the whole story would collapse like a pin-pricked balloon. But it does hold together as a 5-Star tale. Thanks for a wonderful ride!

Great story

The sister is a very intriguing character--she's got a personality that's provocative while also feeling true to a little sister's annoying/teasing/affectionate relationship to her older brother. Rare to see and very well done.

Where to begin?

This is fantastic! Character development worthy of a professional, a build that made me savor all of six pages, and just enough sweetness to leave a lasting impression.

And, sweet Mother Macree, that was hot. :D Well done, sir!

nice

Really nice. My personal distaste for rim jobs are all that's getting in the way of me personally giving it 5/5, but, that's just me.

Surprise

You did say he maxed the SAT's and completed a BS in 3 and then you made us forget it. You made the characters real.
Excellent ending... I didn't even have an inkling it was coming.

Thanks!

I hate how

much I love this! Your characters are so fantastic!! Incest stories are a guilty pleasure... and when I like them this much it makes me feel so dirty. Keep up the great writing.

Great Story

Great fuckin' story. Your characters are excellent, and the buildup was supreme. The kissing game was a clever vehicle too. Thanks!

Sweet, sexy, funny!

I love your stories. The long slow buildup is a big turn on. And even though it's not believable in a literal sense, it's believable as a story, which is good enough for me.

Thanks for sharing!
-Carl

That is superb

Man, if I ever get to write a story as good as that I will be one happy fella.

You Did It. This is a Masterpiece!

Thank you. Thank you. Thank you.

You drew me in to the sibling's story of closeness, which became sexual. This is a must read for everyone.

Fantastic!

Wonderful story. Great, compelling characters and I love the interplay in their relationship. Some serious talent here man.

Amazing

Hats off to the author for a wonderful story filled with humor, great dialogue and two highly engaging siblings. More stories such as this one would be very welcome.

bad

i couldn't even get a thrid of the way down the first page it was so bad. no guy is going to put up with her constant teasing and infering that he is gay he would avoid all contact with her until he went to college even going so far as to talk his parents into letting him go early then he would stay there never to return keep it realistic and within the boundries of human nature please

Paco did you upset someone?

this is a fine story so i can only imagine the person who left the prior comment is what? an ex wife or girlfriend. To anyone who is in any doubt its good- read it. -- UK CYNIC

Hrrrrm

I’ve got my egalitarian leanings, but it’s a bit difficult for my feelings to be hurt by a commenter who: (1) can’t find a shift key; (2) can’t write a complete sentence; (3) can’t spell “third” or “boundaries” or “inferring”; and (4) can't grasp the difference between inferring something and implying it anyway. Let’s see, did I miss anything? Chime in on the dufus below if you like folks. The best thing to do with the village idiot is form a circle around him and then point and laugh.

brilliant

i really liked this story, it reminded me a bit of 'words on skin' but that was great too so im not complaining. Keep up the good work!

"bad"?

Please don't laugh too hard at the idiot below. Some people need help and understanding instead of ridicule. Poor thing, he/she/it couldn't even complete an entire sentence...

Nice tale though, and well written. Lots of fun to read. Thank you author.

Your incest stories rave but your others suck

Your writing seems so recognizable on these incest stories but your other writing seems as though done by another person altogether. Are you sure you are writing all these? "Stolen Kisses" and "Words on Skin" are just GREAT! But they are written so differently from the other laundry list of stories. Sweet, sensitive, and so very sexy, unlike your "Hero" stories of which I'm still trying to complete even ONE.
Well keep it up. Maybe I'll go back and see what my problem is and write you again....

Author comment

For "Anony Chris": Here's an example of why it's fun to be me - I can tease out a compliment lurking in the background of your comment. Yes, I wrote all of these stories. And, yes, they are different. WoS and SK, which are similar in many ways, including that they're both written in third person POV, differ from my others which are largely 1st person POV. They *should* sound different and I'm glad you thought they did. Dear sweet Anony, just because you don't like something doesn't mean it "sucks" - just as your comment doesn't "suck." Find something in it you can appreciate. You know, like I just did. :)

Excellent!

Paco Fear, your stories are great!

And your comments on 'Hrrrm' were right on target

Great writing, and i agree with most of the others in that this and "Words on Skin" seem much better in terms of depth and plot than some of your others. The Hero stories are okay, but those two almost seem in a different league

Second

The first of your stories I read was Words on Skin. This is the second and I'm glad to say it didn't disappoint. :D

SQUEAMISH???

Why are we here...but for you to make us "SQUEAM"! You've done a bang up job, too, by GOLLY! Excellent prose, my friend.

Nice work

Great writing and soo Hott..... I've read a couple Hero stories and this was just as good... might want to here from these two characters again... any chance?