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by Thomas Drablézien01/06/09

Good first submission!

Well paced with a nice touch of warmth to it and smutty enough to be arousing without falling into the trap of coarseness. Well done.


On a technical note though, a bit of work needed on your proof reading and layout. Some of the dialogue was a bit crowded and a few typos. Hence only a 75%, but nothing bad enough to seriously detract from your story. Keep writing!

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by playn4fun01/07/09

Liked it

Good story, nice read. nice easy lead-up. great first submission

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by harduk701/02/12

brilliant story .. i loved it!!

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