Conumdrum Ch. 09

enjoyed it deeply

Enjoyed it! Keep writing

I liked this story line

until the eighth chapter, then seeing how you were following through with it, for me, just turned it into crap.
I only started to read this ninth chapter to see if you were going to end somewhere else, but, within the first couple of paragraphs I seen that you were finishing with the BDSM crap after all. I've wasted my time reading this garbage, had this been in the BDSM catagory, I would not have waisted said time.

To The Person Who gave the Feedback.

& to anonymous from Usa i m really very very sorry for posting my comments 2 times.Trust me , I never did it intentionally.You know that security code they ask you to fill before submitting your comments???( For eg:-E3F6).It ask two or more times before i give my comments Now you tell me what to do??.I would really like to apologies to the author for messing the scoring.Thanks to the person who gave the feedback from AOL.com you know who you are.I like & respect people who are polite.

You dont keep a lying piece of trash!

What a cheater has done before a cheater will do again. Unless of course he keeps her at all times in an escape proof cage.

A great work of fiction, and could be real

As I stated in chapter four comments, that I would wait until all chapters were posted to read the complete work, and that is what I did. The author wrote one hell of a good story and should be proud of his work, especially when you read it without interruptions. There is enough information in the story to make it seem real to life, and bring the characters to life.I feel that if a girl is raised up under a strong dominate family, that she might have inborn tendencies to be a submissive, and would be venerable to evil people,especially people who wanted to make slaves for sale out of naive women.This is just an all around good work of fiction and I am glad that I read it. Thanks for all of the effort that it took to write and post a very good story.....Rich

Fantastic...

That is all that needs to be said.

Thankyou......

.....for a wonderful story, I have enjoyed this & hope that you will be posting some more for us to enjoy.

Very good

I enjoyed your writing. Whilst the sexual content is not my particular choice, (I doubt very much whether I could set asside my inclinations as Matt did), there is plausibility in the domestic scenario. Doubtless there are thos who will find the int gathering, recce, and insertion implausible the are a vehicle to progress the story and very well done. I haven't heard the Corps called slime for quite a while.

WELL!!!

Every start, every beginning has an end & good to see the ending of this story.I personally dont like BDMS stories but this was different.I gave 100 for first 7 chapters.Please dont mind.The idea of hypnosis & drugs was good.Like I said before your ideas & concept are good.But there are so many questions still unanswered like Why elizabeth's parents were never informed about her activities??? honestly I dont want to go into that area now.You are the author & it's up to you how to twist & turn your story.Anyways it was a good story & I hope you'll write some more interesting stories.I was wondering who that person was who gave "Feedback" from AOL.com.IF YOU READ THIS COMMENT TODAY PLEASE REPLY ME.NOTHING I WANT TO THANK YOU.

Bravo!

You have quickly become one of the better and for me first authors I look for when going to the site. This longer piece was very well written and developed. The best thing I can ever say for a tale is I hated for it to end and this was definitely one of those.The only quibble is a little one: I find Beth's talking in public about her collar's significance unrealistic. Please keep submitting. Thank you.

Well done

Very good job. Nice flowing story line. While I don't normally enjoy BDSM stories (maybe the Loving Wives classification was a little off) this one kept my interest. Maybe just a little too in depth with the chase description concerning highways and locations, but that a is minor complaint that is vastly overcome with the pleasure I received by not seeing plot breaks or grammar mistakes. I will definitely read your other stories. Thanks again.

Great

In a sea of wimps,cockolds, perverts and loosers this story was a lifeline. Well written and entertaining, and thats what it's all about. Thanks for your talent and time.

absolutely delightful!

The entire story is excellent work. This last chapter nicely wraps up the situation and resolves any last questions. To that point, an element which is touched upon is in the discussion with Hendy, which refers to the treatment toward Beth as being a "demonstration of caring and loving. If you didn't care you wouldn't bother." Without otherwise having any reference to punishment, it is a reminder that the opposite of Love is, actually, not Hate; rather, it is complete Indifference. Back to this story. I found it to be an excellent plotline, nicely delivered. Good work!
-- KK in Texas

Entertaining and Captivating

Every Day I've jumped to the computer when I first woke up. I just had to get to the next episode of Conumdrum. Sadly, it is finished, and anxiously I await Kezza67's next offering. Well done even if the lifestyle appalls me, the story is so well done I had to read every chapter!

I LIKE THE STORY GOOD

I don`t like BDSM, but this kept me going back each day. I liked it agood mix--keep up the good read

Beautiful finish

As I said yesterday when all the readers were bashing you. I think you did a wonderful job with the final piece.
I, as I said yesterday, would love to have my wife be my slave in this manner. I have had online slaves, but nothing compares to real life.

I thank you for your story.

Very Good Work

You could see that we were going into BDSM shit from the second chapter if you only detected it in the eigth chapter then you were asleep at the trigger. I was hoping that there would be some way out of the trap but I do think that Matt
paid the price of bad prior evaluation of who he wanted to marry. None of my personal prejudices take anything away from the quality of the story. Very fine development of the story and the characters.. Thanks for all your hard work.

I agree with Bruce in South America

Well put together and no wimping out in my opinion. I for one don't want to beat some chick with a whip but there are freaks who like their wife's to screw other guys then come home and tell them about it just to humiliate themselves. LOL

Wonderful finish

Excellent

Well Done

Well Done!

Captain # 36 Compney

Super Story

Super Story
Wonderful story, however I think another chapter or epilog or the aftermath regarding the bad guys and their powerful friends would make this story really great.

I enjoyed the story!

I enjoyed this story. I thought that it was entertaining. I hope that you keep writing on this board.

How Could What Was So Bad Ruin What Could

What a few see as pleasing submission I can only see disrespect for those things human and humane.

Therefor any attempt to glorify or elevate addictive pain and self sought disrespect ruins the rest of the apples in the talented basket.

Not a parable but writer when you painted the absurdities of BDSM at an extreme everyone knew it was bad so to say a little is OK is like saying gee she's only a little bit pregnant or look a semi-boneless ham. In either case there ain't no such. Kill = bad /// Rip Off Arm = OK???

So in total a well written waste of talent for what it could have been. No reasonable man could beat his love to signify anything but disdain for her and her freaky addictions.

I look forward to your next but please don't waste your and my time on subhuman painful disrespect by choice.

Hope there's more

The story had me looking each day to see it you'd added to it. I'll never think of Herefordshire in the same way again!!!

Great Details

The story is in the details, great presentation!

Well Written

I, too, couldn't wait for the next chapter. I thought that this was very well written, and extremely engaging. I could follow the story even though I know nothing about the military (unless you count watching war movies), have never been to the UK, and know nothing about BDSM (other than what I have read on sites like this one). I'm not a big fan of BDSM stories, but I do like some stories of that type (the good ones are better than the cuckold or incest stories, in my opinion). Its a matter of personal taste. Be thankful that we all have different preferences; otherwise the world would be awfully boring!

To "How Could What Was So Bad Ruin What Could" I, respectfully, disagree with you. Yes the story had a little BDSM in it, but that wasn't its focus.

I agree with "Super Story" that another chapter might tie up a few lose ends, like was the government able to rescue the other victims and punish those that had bought those women. Personally, if this hadn't been fiction, I would hope that those that did this to Elisabeth would suffer unending pain, which I'm sure was the reaction that Kezza67 wanted.

Very Good

All I can say is well done.

Very Good

All I can say is well done.

Great Reading...

Great tale. Enough detail to make it interesting and realistic but not stifle it. I look forward to more stories.

Need closure

Need to know what happened to perps and their contacts or if they got off, as in real life, because they are politicians.

A few things ...

Conundrum, not conumdrum.

Plurals do not require an apostrophe, that is: balaclavas, not balaclava's.

To Anon

Byte Me OOOPPPPSSSS BITE ME!

A Lot to Consider...

It is oversimplifying to label this story as thought-provoking. I will be considering the upshot for a good long while, as this story is not easy to categorize or summarize.

One of Your Best!!!

I have never read any of the BDSM stories as I have felt they were demeaning in nature; however, this was done with loving care and with emotion. I have gained an insight that I never had into the drives and needs of a submissive woman. I truly feel enlightened and rewarded by this story. You have lead me to explore and ponder a facet of human nature I suspected but never faced with understanding.

Pages and pages of mindless bullshit. On and on ..the story drags......on and on.

He knows how to cross t's and dot i's and thats it........Your a waste of time kezza 67,,,,,,,,,,,,

Have to admit..trash.

Porn by a seriously deranged 12 year old.

not bad, it's not my type of story

but the writing was good and the over all feel made it's point. Your a damn good writer.

Sick bastard doing exactly what the other asshole did to her!

This is sick so I rated it 1*.

Based on the final chapter, I have concluded that the author has the same sickness that Master had and is in need of therapy.

Are we voting on the story or the author?

I agree with others that BDSM is not my thing, but that this is a well-written story. If I had to guess, I believe that the author and the protagonist are in closer sympathy than the pain & rape artists descdribed in the story.

One interesting indication of this is that horrific acts are mentioned and alluded to, but the actual sex scenes described are *relatively* mild by comparison. The most violent scenes are the retribution scenes by the SAS-trained team after Elizabeth is rescued.

While some of the story exposition was too long for me, I could easily see the tracking exercise being played out on video. Of course, I must admit to a preference for stories with much dialogue and relatively little exposition. But dialogue is hard to write, and other readers' preferences may differ.

One nitpicking editing issue in this series and in many other stories on Lit - *please* learn and use the difference between "discreet" and "discrete."

DWormcock is so stupid

you have to dig to find her IQ

amazing

you have written a story that i would not leave. are you one of the tip toe boys?.

OUTSTANDING!!!!!!!

Thanks for sharing.

Wrong Category?

you should probably label this mind control or BDSM instead of loving Wives but it was a good story anyways.

Great story

Loved it. You're a rarity here--someone who can actually spin an entertaining tale.

Great story

I really enjoyed this one. I'm usually not fond of reading stories written by British writers but this one is an exception. It was great. Thanks for the enjoyable read.
No offense about he Brit comment I'm just not familiar with the lingo used by you guys.


Ace4869

can you train my wife to be a submissive

if we could only train our wives to act like that.. i think we call them stefford wifes. not in this lifetime will it ever happen

A most unusual story...

...and well written. Thank you.

An excellent 5* story

Well done. Thank you.

Well worth the read.

Thanks Kezza67, another fine story.