by RejectReality
Very well written.Despite the author's own self-depricating comments, it had a very realistic feeling. Every woman's fantasy come to vital, throbbing fruition. Would love to see more from this author.
Is it me or did summer come early!! Talk about to damn hot! This story definitely is! I've orgasmed until I've passed out before and it's a feel that can't be described. I felt like I was in the story witnessing that fantastic event first hand. Wow! You are truly a wonderful writer. Keep up the great work.
Loved it! Every horny housewife's fantasy. Very well written and believable. Thank you too for knowing the difference between "than" and "then" that so many writers here don't seem to know (one of my pet peeves). Keep writing!
A well done tale It sure did raise my interest. I hope you can keep up the good work you have filed this year. It almost read like a woman was the author, with the emphasis on the womans point of view
This story rocked - seriously hot, want to read more by the author - reality or not this was great!!
I'd be either one of those guys... and not complain one bit about "sloppy". Read several of your stories this morning, thanks for writing such vivid descriptions of ripe beautiful women getting overwhelmed with desire...
You really did a great job, here. Your grammar is excellent, which helps to stay lost in the story. Nothing pulls me out of a story and back into reality like a grammar or spelling mistake. You story was also very hot. It made me wet.
The only thing that would have made that hotter would be something like:
Once Ron and Mike had finished dressing, she gestured for them to come to her. She pulled each into a passionate kiss, and then said, "You are the best sons ever."
What a terrible pun-ch line! Loved the story. Great pacing. Did want them to come back.