I loved the twist at the end and the erotic sex. I suggest an editor, just to work out the little things we all miss when we're writing. But, still a very good read that I hope others take a look at, too!
For a first time story I think this is very good. hope to see more stories from you.
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Anonymous09/23/09
Exceptionally hot
Your story was fabulous - very sexy & erotic without being grotty. The detail with which you described your character preparing for her blind date was great to read & helped to build some anticipation. Excellent job!
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Great first story
I loved the twist at the end and the erotic sex. I suggest an editor, just to work out the little things we all miss when we're writing. But, still a very good read that I hope others take a look at, too!
I liked the story too.
I liked the story too. It was a cute fantasy with a comical twist at the end.
Very nice writing.
For a first time story I think this is very good. hope to see more stories from you.
Exceptionally hot
Your story was fabulous - very sexy & erotic without being grotty. The detail with which you described your character preparing for her blind date was great to read & helped to build some anticipation. Excellent job!
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