This is a good story, and with a happy ending to this part. I would hope that the author would write more about the adventures of the couple. Thanks for the good post....Rich
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Anonymous06/25/09
Wonderful story.
I enjoyed reading this great story. Please continue witing more parts to this story.
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Anonymous03/31/11
rewrite
this needs a rewrite first you say everyone calls him first then you say he was the black sheep of the family being ignored by his parents. if he was ignored and the black sheep they sure wouldn't be calling him and if they did he sure wouldn't help them keep it somewhat realistic and believable or put it in the fantasy area
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Anonymous06/08/12
yet another waste of time
why is it that writers here can't keep the plot of the stories consistant? you said he was the black sheep and ignored if so NO ONE WOULD EVER CALL HIMESPECIALLY NOT FIRST. THE BEGINING RUIN THE WHOLE STORY. DELETE AND DO A REWRITE AND DO IT RIGHT THIS TIME AROUND.
The last two 'anonymous' members who make the same point... A lot can happen between adolescence and adulthood. Being the black sheep growing up does not mean that your family can't see you as being the go-to guy in a crisis as an adult. I know, because I've been there. There's a reason this is tagged 'true' ;)
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Anonymous11/08/12
totally fake
never happen in a million years i agree with the other two anons total bullshit.
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Anonymous08/22/13
Impossible
Plot questions aside, some of the positions you had them in just seemed impossible. Like in the shower he was fucking her in the ass AND had 3 fingers in her pussy? How is that possible? Seems unbelievable.
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Anonymous10/04/13
I think it was a wonderful story...... It shouldnt be about how the begining is worded.... It should only matter that you enjoyed it...... I personally loved it... Thank you *5 star rating* for me....
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Anonymous10/05/14
wonderful story 5+
I really enjoyed reading this great story. Please writ more parts to this story.
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Anonymous01/06/15
Loved the story, would like to see a sequel for this maybe have them get married and have a kid.
A happy story
This is a good story, and with a happy ending to this part. I would hope that the author would write more about the adventures of the couple. Thanks for the good post....Rich
Wonderful story.
I enjoyed reading this great story. Please continue witing more parts to this story.
rewrite
this needs a rewrite first you say everyone calls him first then you say he was the black sheep of the family being ignored by his parents. if he was ignored and the black sheep they sure wouldn't be calling him and if they did he sure wouldn't help them keep it somewhat realistic and believable or put it in the fantasy area
yet another waste of time
why is it that writers here can't keep the plot of the stories consistant? you said he was the black sheep and ignored if so NO ONE WOULD EVER CALL HIMESPECIALLY NOT FIRST. THE BEGINING RUIN THE WHOLE STORY. DELETE AND DO A REWRITE AND DO IT RIGHT THIS TIME AROUND.
Re: Last two comments...
The last two 'anonymous' members who make the same point... A lot can happen between adolescence and adulthood. Being the black sheep growing up does not mean that your family can't see you as being the go-to guy in a crisis as an adult. I know, because I've been there. There's a reason this is tagged 'true' ;)
totally fake
never happen in a million years i agree with the other two anons total bullshit.
Impossible
Plot questions aside, some of the positions you had them in just seemed impossible. Like in the shower he was fucking her in the ass AND had 3 fingers in her pussy? How is that possible? Seems unbelievable.
I think it was a wonderful story...... It shouldnt be about how the begining is worded.... It should only matter that you enjoyed it...... I personally loved it... Thank you *5 star rating* for me....
wonderful story 5+
I really enjoyed reading this great story. Please writ more parts to this story.
Loved the story, would like to see a sequel for this maybe have them get married and have a kid.
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