Love Is Ch. 03

I really like this story so far but

it gets a bit hard to follow at times. Where one scene ends and another begins seem to be a bit blended. I have to go back and reread certain paragraphs to realize that a scene has changed. This story is really good and I would hate to see it over looked by readers who get frustrated at times just because of a few minor issues. Do you have an editor yet? I have heard that it's sometimes hard to get on on here but maybe if you don't have one yet you should try to get one. An editor can catch misspellings as well as making scene changes better and will catch anything that doesn't seem 'right'. I'm looking forward to the next part.

Ditto about the scene changes

Maybe you can add in a line or a star or something to indicate a scene change. That will help the flow. An editor will help with all the spelling and grammar mistakes. Also, not much actually happened in this chapter. Perhaps in preparation for a lot of action in the next chapter? I'm not sure, but I liked the first chapter and the second was okay. I didn't enjoy this chapter but I tend to give the benefit of the doubt, so I'll still read the next chapter.

Love it

Sure there are a few grammer issues, but i really like the plot of the story. Its really caputered my attention and now cannot wait to read part 4! please get it up fast!!

i love it! it was just perfect..are you going to continue

Great!

I would like to encourage you to continue writing! This story, a new story, or whatever you want to write.