I enjoyed this story. Don't pay much attention to those who didn't like it. I would guess English is not your native language, unless it is the British form of English.
You could use an editor to help clean things up.
Keep writing.
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Anonymous01/26/09
thanks
yes i have learned british english at school and college.
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Anonymous09/03/11
A Good Story
Well I also disagree with other readers, and I have liked your story alot, its indeed a good one , keep writting new stories.
lgood story
I enjoyed this story. Don't pay much attention to those who didn't like it. I would guess English is not your native language, unless it is the British form of English.
You could use an editor to help clean things up.
Keep writing.
thanks
yes i have learned british english at school and college.
A Good Story
Well I also disagree with other readers, and I have liked your story alot, its indeed a good one , keep writting new stories.
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