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Love Happy Endings
Very good reading. This seemed so real. I don't like stories that sound made up with graphics that make you feel... Yeah.. Right.
Keep it real... Nice job!!!
WTF
he pretends he didn't know and didn't want to know whether Sharon's baby's his (of course) or his wife's his (of course not)! happy ending? it's about a philandering idiot fucking women left and right, not caring much about consequences...
good read but an error in the time table
The internet was not available 30 yrs ago other than that good read.
This is a nice change.
I have yet to see one of your stories that hasn't been an interesting read. This one is no exception.
Beautiful and Interesting Story
Your dialogues come out quite smoothly and even though the
plot could be antecipated the people were very interesting and how they got the "obvious" done was interesting!
You are really my favorite author and it is nice to see still putting up with our commentary here on literotica. Thank you!
Very good!
You tell a tale in an excellent style. Very different and still a great story.
Better than fluff
Normally, I enjoy your stories. This seemed a bit contrite and a bit contrieved. Did you throw in the Valentine's Day references as an after thought?
I didn't feel that this was a Valentine's Day story. You as an author failed me, the reader.
Nonetheless, this story is better than many of the others who posted stories that are not even fluff.
A lovely story!
Thank you so much!I really enjoyed it.
Excellent!
Excellent story! This is well-done, especially given a "delicate" topic. (Well, not that it's likely that many Amish are spending much time on the internet, or visiting this website! LOL) Good work, plausibly written.
-- KK in Texas
Wonderful Story!
Truly excellent story! You did it again!!
I almost gave it a 25 because of the author......
...but as I typed the comment, I talked myself out of it
DG, you are good, no one can dispute that, but this story has everything that if this was done from the woman's point of view you'd be lamb basted over coals for it.
-You have a main character, who while married is basically chasing after a married woman, and even though her belief's and up bringing say its wrong, she keeps meeting with him and lies to everyone about their relationship so they can keep meeting.
-The story by the end has them both cheating on their marriage's to satisfy their lust for each other.
- Then there is a rationalizing that because two marriages are now possibly "stronger" because of their cheating it is all right. He rededicated himself to his family and Sharon now has a child she has always wanted but never could have. ??????
And that point bugs me the most. That the reader is given to accept, a child being born from the adultery and passed off as the child of the lovers husband is ok long as the woman really wants it and the husband never knows any different.
I just can't get behind a story that if it was a woman bragging about how her affair made her life better, even how she was raising the child of her lover with her husband and he didn't know the child wasn't his, there's be pitchforks out
While I like various pieces of your work, personally I just didn't go for this one. Thanks for submitting it though. There hasn't been much else to read here lately that I've been interested in.
-Risq
Good luck in the contest!
~ Imp (Alessia Brio)
Risq is right
I almost gave you a better score for your writing because you are DGHear, one of my favorite authors, but I just could not do it. This story was disappointing coming from an author of your standing. If you were any other writer, the readers would be tearing you up for writing such a story. So, I will give a 25 for a decently written crappy story.
well
some say they are disappointed because of the cheating. but in this story and in real life there are situations like this. and eventhough it still was cheating, just as a fact, there was nothing dirty in it. not like other writers who just create the most greedy sextramps. no they both helped each other to find the right way back.and if a lot of people would learn as much out of one mistake, we would have a lot better world.
A beautiful Story
A well written and beautiful story. So full of real life,
but with a happy ending. Best of luck in the contest
Superior Story, Well told
Your story was very well written, and held my interest
throughout. Loved it, good luck in the Contest
Nicely done
One technical detail... Amish dresses don't have buttons.
Re the "technical" detal
There are different groups of Amish with slight variations in customs. Some use buttons, some use hook-and-eye, etc.
I Liked This Story
I disagree with Risq - I think this was a well written and romantic story. Normally I don't like cheating wife stories where there are no consequences, but this one worked.
Very Interesting
Well done DG, I was sceptical at first with the Amish background but the more i read the more i was sucked in. Good luck in the contest
Great
I really liked this story. I liked the twist and enjoyed it.
Typica Great DG Hear story
I thought the story was beautifully written by a very talented writer. Reading the comments, I sometimes wonder if your readers actually read these stories or just make up their own plots and claim they were part of the story.
60 year old George
Thank you
I enjoyed your work, romantic and sensual.
Why does one read these stories?
One reader made a serious personal attack on this story and author. Why? Did you read this story for entertainment purposes or did you read it to spew your vial opinion and hate. This is an erotica site. Why are you here? Get a life!
Well Written, But. . .
Poor women stuck with a cheating dog, and the Amish slut is just that, a slut. Nobody's the wiser, but the cheaters win. Both marriages are based on a lie, hope they all get cancer, confess on their death beds, but spouses don't forgive them and they have to rot in hell, or Ohio.
A Good Story
This was a good story, and well written, except for the part about the internet thirty years ago. I did think you spent a bit too long describing the life of the Amish.
I'm also rather surprised to read so much vitriol in an E/C story. Somne people are acting as if they were reading a story in L/W.
good luck
I almost forgot to add: Good luck in the contest.
greast
Great story. Only thing I didn't get was that you said it took place over 30 yrs ago, yet you said at one point that you went back to the hotel and looked up their culture "on-line". I'm assuming this was a typo....good story :D
Bastard!
Sorry, but that's really what was conceived here wasn't it? Well written, but just cannot get sympathetic for a story about a guy running around having and leaving his babies all over like some dog in the alley. He's not the hand of God; just some traveling salesman taking advantage of a lonely, sad and neurotic religious fanatic. Don't want to sermonize, but maybe you can write a followup where Jeff teaches Sharon how to steal and take drugs when romancing her again. Way to go! Whose hand would Jeff be then after visiting upon the Amish just about every vice that's destroying modern civilization: crime, drugs and the breakdown of morals and the family.
Nice read
Maybe not your best efford ever but still a nice read.
To "Anonymous in South": wearing a hooded white dress in your free time?
Regards,
Umberto
A Good Story
The main character wasn't a hero just an oridnary guy with all of the usual problems in life. Cheaters are not my favorite people so I didn't get a sense of sympathy for him or for the waitress but I do understand what happened to them. The thing with the internet was confusing but over all not a bad story. Good luck.
I Liked It
When I was young and my wife was pregenant with our second daughter I sliped while on the road in Evensville Ind. I had a great time and the sex was exciting. I knew I would do it again, than when I got home I arrived late and my family was asleep in our bed where they had been waiting for me. As I stood there looking at them and what I could loose I promised myself I would always be the best husband and father I could, I never came close to cheating again. Several months later I found out the womans husband hired a detective so he could divorce her and sent pictures too two wives. This started a week after I had been with her. If you place your family first your life is fuller and a lot less stressfull. Your stories are always great, thanks! Reformed.
I'm a fan
I've been reading your stories for a while. I'm a fan and this didn't disappoint me. It held my interest.
Good luck in the contest.
Great Story
There is really not much else to say but great story and keep up the good work.
Disturbing story
Problem with this story can be illustrated if one MINOR change is made near the beginning of the story and then the basic plot line still followed through, though allowing for that change. Suppose at the beginning Jeff 'hears' Sharon is about 25 years old. She tells basically the same stories to Jeff except her child's age she claims is at home therefore could be maybe only 8. Jeff seduces her and comes back sometime later to find that Sharon had only been 16 at the time having lied to him about her situation. When it was learned she was having an illegitimate baby she ran away never to be heard from again and Jeff's baby was probably given up by her to an agency. Where exactly is the greatness in this story? So there is some kind of romance and beauty in Jeff giving a bastard to 40 years old Sharon's dimwitted husband but if Jeff impregnates the wrong Sharon it VIVIDLY demonstrates a not so pretty outcome.
Thanks
I've dined in those amish restraunts and been fascinated by the amish women. How beautiful they are with no makeup and their stout bodies. Thanks for the fantasy.
One glaring error
At the end of the story, you say that "All this took place over thirty years ago."
However, elsewhere you say, "Back at the hotel, I went on-line to read more about the Amish way of life."
There was no "on-line" back in 1978.
Enjoyable with reservation
It's difficult not to like this story. Everyone is happier at the end. The prose was polished, the characters interesting and the premise original. But, for me, it just seemed to carry a message of "The end justifies the means".I actually found the husband to be unlikable. During the time he was separated from his family it seemed his thoughts and attention were, for the most part, consumed with what he perceived to be the physical delights of this Amish wife. On occasion most married folks will occasionally carry a torch for someone other than their spouse. This isn't unusual nor unnatural, and it certainly doesn't equate to infidelity. Celebrity crushes are commonplace. But how we respond to the effect of the crush is the crux. IMO this man took advantage of the naivete of a woman curious about the world outside her own. He knowingly coaxed her from her cloistered existence to join him in a carnal journey that was more for his benefit than hers. By demanding in an intimate moment that she use language foreign to her code of behavior was his way of making her equally complicit in this illicitness. Her acquiescence to his abrupt attempt at seduction seemed too simple and too easy. The resultant pregnancies of both this Amish woman and his wife, and the accompanying happiness that all parties experienced, was a way of rationalizing this man's indiscretion. In the hands of most other writers, I doubt this story would have possessed much credibility or value. DG is an accomplished writer and somehow, even for me, pulls this off. I enjoyed and found informative the back story which explained the attitudes and lifestyle of the Amish. Again, as to the story, perhaps the message may be better interpreted as "Alls well that ends well."My thanks, DG.
Not really Valentine's Day
The V-Day part in this is a paltry offering. I was interested to read this because it was exciting to have a story covering Amish--they are just people too. I grew up in PA, next to a Mennonite community, and I must mention that the dress you described was much more fitting to the Mennonite custom than any Amish. Also, no buttons. I find the whole situation slightly unbelievable. Any Amish restaurant with lady waitresses would be keeping a tight rein on them with male bosses--to protect them from outsider's impropriety far more than to trap them. Impropriety such as the stupid guy in this story. You don't make conversation with an Amish lady like that. Any self-respecting, married lady would be more insulted and frightened than attracted. Even if she was so stressed and restless because of her inability to have children, then he took serious advantage of her--she would have an even more serious crisis when she found she was having his bastard child, no matter how much she wanted one. Better he had raped her. Yes, Amish folk are sexual beings too, but when they are also very dedicated to their faith and beliefs. This would emotionally scar her even more. Also, her fellow restaurant workers would have come together to tell her she needed to stay away from him. That's part of the whole point of their powerful community: every is everyone else's conscience. Also, you seem so sure that Amish women are terribly deprived sexually. Why can't they be back with their husbands having spectacular sex? I'm sure it happens. Then there's his poor wife. How terrible is it that when she wanted nothing more than to have him with her, was desperate for his love, his company, for him to be with his children--he went and not only would give up his selfishness and be a the father and husband he had committed to being, but he fucked some other woman, and fathered a child by her. God, his wife should have just left him. NOT a romantic, touching, helpful, or even thought provoking story. So much for Valentine's Day.
Educational and a Sexy Story, too
Well written. I thought this might have ended up being degrading to the Amish people, but it wasn't. Nice job and very thoughtful.
I'm familiar with the Amish area in central Ohio
Since I live in Southwest Ohio, I have traveled to the Amish Counties of Ohio, and found the Amish people very friendly. I do admit that some of the young women dressed with their traditional garb have a way of being sexy. It's funny, because they are covered from ankle to neck, yet still sexy. I enjoyed your little tale, and found the vividly expressed sex very exciting and hot to read. Thanks for the good story....Rich
Excellent story
Good story, well told.
Thank you very much.
Outstanding story!
I really loved your story. It really is one of the best I have encountered in a long time. Thanks for sharing it with us.
Well Done
While this may be completely atypical of an Amish wife the details of the Ohio Amish community are very truthfully depicted. Good story.
2 things
Obviously the comment of internet 30 yrs ago. Can that be fixed?
Everything was very respectful and genuine. I found one issue when he makes her say what she wants in the bedroom. It felt very crude. She was already out of her comfort zone, why if he really cared for her would he push it? It almost had the same feel as if someone found someone down and made them say "Ive fallen and I cant get up" before helping them up. It just almost had a cruel undertone. Putting myself in her place, that would have been a very degrading moment. The rest was very tasteful. :>
Very nice, gentle story
This story is so different from the usual ones that I look for. There is such a gentle feel to it and the main character seemed so nice. It was a good change of pace to read this. Hope you write more.
I loved it!!!
You have me horny and crying. I haven't decided that is such a good combination yet. I only have one minor thing that bugs me about the story. If this took place 30 years ago, Jeff wouldn't be searching the internet. I started using the internet in '94 in college and I was in the extreme minority. I was willing to overlook that minor detail ;)
Hi All! DG Hear
Just so everyone knows, I get it about the internet. It was a stupid error on my part. I guess if anyone reads this story 20 years from now, it won't make any difference. LOL Again, thank you all for your comments. I really do appreciate all of you taking the time to read, vote and comment on my stories.
With respect
DG Hear
30 years ago??
Half way through the first page the writer states that he went back to his Hotel and went on-line.
Wow, that wee town of Berlin was so way ahead of the rest of the world - 30 years ago.!!!!!
Then near the end of the story he states that the Amish people were probably not too familiar with DNA testing.
Well who was familiar with it 30 years ago???
A good story really stuffed up.
DG Hear never disapoints
I have little time to read anything on Lit, but I had to search for DG and am happy to say thank you for another of your very good stories.
PT
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