All Comments on 'Edward and Suzanne: Canoe Trip'

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davion2308davion2308over 15 years ago
Pretty good

Well-written story. I enjoyed reading it. The sex was good, but it seemed more like a story about sex, no so much the being outside. You threw us right into sex. Take more time setting up the outside-ness they're experiencing. Did the woman ever go naked outside before? Was it better/different from indoor sex? That sort of thing.

Keep going!

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