Carmen: Grand Slam

Good stuff

The trashy dialogue is what makes these stories. Good stuff!

The boys didn't have much use for her other than

Her asshole. I think they like boys better by the way they treated that girl. I'm suprised that they didn't suck each others cock off after they fucked that girl up the ass.

Great story. More tales of Carmen's anal adventures!!

The writing was piss poor.

I guess it was a good story but the writing, the characters, and most of just, let me put it this way... It's like someone jut wrote this story under their sheets with a flash light without putting any effort or thought into it.
Not to mention how vastly unrealistic it is. It could use some editing and maybe it could go through a few drafts. It reads like a first rough draft.

The writing was piss poor.

I guess it was a good story but the writing, the characters, and most of just, let me put it this way... It's like someone jut wrote this story under their sheets with a flash light without putting any effort or thought into it.
Not to mention how vastly unrealistic it is. It could use some editing and maybe it could go through a few drafts. It reads like a first rough draft.

The writing was piss poor.

I guess it was a good story but the writing, the characters, and most of just, let me put it this way... It's like someone jut wrote this story under their sheets with a flash light without putting any effort or thought into it.
Not to mention how vastly unrealistic it is. It could use some editing and maybe it could go through a few drafts. It reads like a first rough draft.

fantasy

I agree that this was great, pure fantasy. I've had similar fantasies to this as recent as.. two seconds ago.. Most of us write these stories more for ourselves, so for myself and, I'm guessing, countless others to have this same anal use & abuse fantasy must mean something. I almost lost it during my read of this story and I'm looking forward to more of Carmen's adventures.