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enjoyable
I found this to be an enjoyable erotic read that moved along nicely. It was well written and the sex was hot as well as tasteful. (no pun intended)
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The Plot was decent
But I think you could have done better! It was very monotone, no excitement or build up leading to them hopping into the sack. You described nothing about Jerry, other than a Tshirt and Sweats, which doesn't really turn a lot of women on! There should have been some flirting or surrepticious looks going on, to make the attraction (on both sides) clearly visible.
All in all, it was a nice story, just really rushed...although I am glad you slowed it down to include dinner at least! lol
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