The idea of making the story the recounting of a daydream is very good. The story line is excellent. There are a typo or two, but nothing that would ruin a well thought out story.
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Neat Approach!
The idea of making the story the recounting of a daydream is very good. The story line is excellent. There are a typo or two, but nothing that would ruin a well thought out story.
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