All Comments on 'Adventures Ch. 01'

Great - even if not quite up to previous work. Now that you are warmed up hit us with some more. Soon!!

Hot promising start ! Please bring his twin sister in !

Sons fucking their mothers are the best........need to just have the two of them together.......

great start! please bring in chelsea, fred, and georgia into the story sometime so that everyone can be happy and there won't have to be any secrets or jealousy among the group.

What's with the great number of stories beginning well having normal good sex then switching and kinky and anal? Why authors keep wrecking good stories by doing anal is a mystery, as most normal people don't have anal sex especially not the large number as in these stories. Authors skip the anal.

Literotica has become home to the UNeducated masses!<BR>

What a SHAME!

Huked on fonix?

It's a good story, editing issues aside and it's good to see you back in action, Dreamscaper. Looking forward to chapter 2!

Loved the Anal part and dropped it a smidge for the other - because there is nothing like a tight wet xxx xxxx.!! If it wasn't for the Anal - would have been a 25. Have him give his twin some Anal in next story~~~~~OH YEAH<<<!!!!

Makes me wish I were 18 again, I really enjoyed it.

"Old oaks and old folks, standing tall just pretend, and I wish I was eighteen again." Thank you George Burns. Anyway, it's a really hot tale so far! Please keep it going at least until twin sis gets in on the action.

Half the story used the words huge cock god that get's so fucking old.

Thundercock? Bwaahaahaahaahaa!

...WTF? Good thing your fantasy takes place in a world without 'Typhus Bacteria', yeah, real good thing. Typhoid fever sucks!>>>> BTW: Get an editor.

Very good story. Please continue with more parts to this story & post the next chapter soon. Please don't pay attention to the negative comments from some people, I enjoyed this story.

as if any guy would put up with the moms slutty friend and no way any mother would put up with her friend embarassing her son keep it atleast sounding realistic

Two years and...? Frankly, I will never understand why people post one chapter before at least several are written. Writing one chapter, and THEN another, and THEN another often leads to plot holes and never ending stories.

CUM ON WHERE ARE THE SERIES HURRY UP NOW WOULD YOU

HOPE U PLAN ON WRITE MORE ABOUT THIS

The vocabulary and imagery in this story aren't nearly up to snuff. It's a decent submission, with some good ideas, but the wording is at a nearly middle-school level.

Dreamscaper was 18 to 22 when he wrote this tale, with a marvelously filthy imagination. I bet his fat young cock was hard when he wrote it, and he unloaded his hot young balls way across the room at the end. I tend to agree, though, with the readers who had second thoughts about the hero in the story fucking his mother up the ass. Ass-fucking mom is okay as a change of pace, say, but a true motherfucker will always prefer sticking his cock up the hole he came out of, his own mother's cunt. That was his birth canal, that's where he's itching to get back up in, and, in my opinion, that's where his huge dose of warm creamy semen belongs.

would love to read what happens next between Sarah, Mary, and Dave and if Chelsea and Georgia join them when they get to the Cabin

Should do a second and maybe a third chapter here...

Said no one Ever. How do you just end it like that?? That shit was worse then the new star wars ending.

Love the story but go die in a hole

Horrible spelling and grammar

This was a good story, but way to short. You also really need a proof reader. You made way to many mistakes. You put in the wrong words and a couple of words with the wrong tense. Other then that it was a pretty good story.

i thought the sex was great. but needed a proof-reader. i'm not usually a fan of quickies - but this was a sexy read!!

Fuck that was Hot, I hope there is a part 2 Cumming

Great story...... But needs more what happens next?

Why did you stop writing? Your stories are excellent.

I can't stand wussy guy stories. 1*

Why did you stop writing? Your stories were excellent and I looked forward to more.