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warm and lovely
a true valentine story.
BOY MEETS GIRL
A VERY NICE AND TOPICAL STORY.
happy valentine's day
Thanks for a good read. It amazing how it is possible for a good writer to write a great story without a lot of gratuitous sex.
Love Story
Thanks for giving us a real love story. It was a good read and a good 'feel good' story!
Delightful!!!!!!
Absolutely delightful! What more need be said?
-- KK in Texas
Wonderful
A great story, with a heartwarming romantic vibe. The "will she/won't she?" moment when you posed the question of going to the motel to her added a nice moment of suspence to the story, too.
Not enough time
The sudden turn-around / love at first sight thing felt a little questionable...I would have much preferred it if you portrayed that it was kind of a revelation thing for him, that he had cared for Sarah long before, but was to stuck in trying to make it work with Julie to see that he was being an idiot. I'd have liked it to be clear that Sarah and he were somewhat close, since their actions seemed like they were more than you portrayed (like the scene in the mall--it felt so weird to think he hadn't seen her in a really long time or really been in contact and suddenly he's telling he to bare her feelings.) It seemed to disregard that he's probably hurt her alot over the years through never giving her a chance, always being stuck on some bitch. It seemed unfair that he should get to go right from sleeping with Julie to sleeping with Sarah, especially it being her first time. It should have been more special that in some hotel room that he got for him and Julie to fuck in. It just seemed far too focused on him, and about his pleasure. Even if he loved her, and realized that in a way he always had, but just hadn't let it come to the surface, even then he should have given up having a night of sex right then and waited for her sake. She deserved better. She deserved to have it be about her, not the jerk who was stuck on a bitchy, shallow cheerleader all those years she waited for him. Julie's too close, too close for Sarah to believably feel good. He should have waited. I find the story working as well as it did, and continuing as well in the future of these two to be very unlikely. He shouldn't have asked her to choose whether to go back to his room. He should have left it til later. Of course she would say yes, she's waited far too long anyway. But it would be ultimately scarring to her. I know how this story goes in real life, and it's a lot more painful. Still, the writing is quite good. not enough about both of them to be truly romantic.
You have done it again, DG
You have again proved you are one of the best writers here. I read every story you write. Have you considered a sequel to this one?
Beautiful Story
DG Hear scores again. This is a nice romantic story that will make us all happy.
DG DG DG GO DG!
I look forward to your contributions they are not just stroke but have that extra feeling we all appreciate
You da Man
DG: You ARE The Man!!!! Everythhing you write is simply brilliant. Thanks for this lovely little story
Happy V-Day Indeed!
Wow. DG can w-r-i-t-e. Short, simple, even predictable but wow. You'd have to have a heart of ice to not appreciate this little story.
Delightful!
DG, you are so good at this. What a perfect Valentines story. Sometimes what's best is right in front of you, just need to stop and look. Well done my friend!
Could read.
Wish you the best in the contest and if this was up to me you would be one of the top three at least.! Could read more than just a story or two if they were all this good. Thanks. JAG/TSO
Very Sweet
I really enjoyed this story a lot. It was sweet and romantic.
Loved IT!!!
And you know how much I LOVE A HAPPY ENDING!
Wonderful and Heartwarming!!!
Terrific Story!! Well written!! Would love to see more of these characters and Julie's response when she realizes she lost Jerry to Sarah.
greeeeeeeeeeeeat
thanks. really enjoyed!! wish u good luck in contest!
You have done it again!!
You really have a way with the written word. Thanks again for another winner. I love all your stories.
i love it :)
i love this one..
so romantic!
i have read many of ur stories n i loved it all.
keep sharing..
wishing u all the best :)
nice story...
i enjoyed reading it...
Super Valentine's Loving
This SEXY ROMANCE is just about the archetypical Valentine's Day story. I'm sorry our hero had to verbally clobber the bitch of a cheerleader, but she betrayed him, revealing her shallow sluttiness. He deserves a splendid woman -- and gets one, a magnificent flower who blossoms before his very eyes. Now he has to master deserving her. I'd like to observe their long-term history. It could be great fun!
Five Star
Refreshing and fun. You warned us it was a short story. I felt it was rushed and it would have been fun to have been fast forwarded maybe five years to expand the everlasting love.
Loved It !!!
I would of liked Jerry to get a little revenge by showing Sarah off to Julie in front of friends. This would of been great in a longer story (more detail), did they get married, have Kidd's and so on.
Thank You for the great read.
THE DUCKLING HAS ARRIVED
AND NOW THE SWAN EMERGES. TK U MLJ LV NV
Perfect finish
It was a just plain nice story that felt good to read and enjoy -
But you made it end just the right way thanks -
I need to get back to work here lol - but thanks for the update on Over The Rainbow -
meh
sarah jerry sarah jerry sarah jerry
it was annoying how almost every time they say talk, the line starts with his/her name. the dialogue was weird and clunky.
Nice but
Too quick, not really a love story. erotic coupling at best, but good one for that category. 5*'s anyway!
Not so good
It was too fast and resulted in the dialogue being jerky and like a bunch of sound bits strung together.
NOT BAD
YOU HAVE WRITTEN BETTER STORIES
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