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by Anonymous

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by Angeline01/28/09

Hey Sis, this is funny!

It has all the oomph and energy of a Souza march, which works well with the theme. I see places where you can edit it down some, and one line(the third)is not so clear to me--I think you're trying to pack too much info into those few words. But those are nitpicks and easily fixable: the theme and tone are perfect. :D xo, S.

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by annaswirls01/28/09

thanks for the read!

Hi! Your poem has been mentioned in today's New Poem Reviews: http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.p hp?t=254157&page=129

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by Anonymous01/29/09

Sappho's daughter

Shouldn't it be Sapphic? I dunno.If you considered dropping a syllable or 3 in the first couple of lines it might read a little better, but good fun

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by Anonymous04/07/11

You suck!

typical angry lesbian (ugly I bet too!)

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