It's My Party

Awesome, well written. I didnt want to stop reading it. Hoping for more sometime.

Loved it!

I came here for the usual reason people check out Literotica--but I was in for a very pleasant surprise when my casual porn read turned into a multi-day obsession! I got to the point where I wasn't even interested in the sex scenes. I love the character development, scenery descriptions, technology use...everything! I've read novels that aren't nearly this good. This story deserves to be in bookshelves next to Arthur C. Clarke and Steven Baxter's Time Odyssey series. If you ever publish a book or series, mark me down as eager to buy every single one!

This probably isn't the response one seeks on such a website, but I think that with the sex tuned down even more (anda hell of a lot of revision for continuity and basic typos) this is publishable. And widely readable.
Try for it.

Fantastic

I like many others come to this site for short term sexual stimulation. This work was remarkable!!! I could not stop reading it. I can't wait to read your other work, that was referenced in other feedback. Please consider publishing your work in a way that would benefit yourself financially. I would have no problem paying to read the stories that someone of your talent has written. Good luck with your future projects. If you decide to publish elsewhere in the future please let the readers of this site know about it. Good luck and thank you for a very enjoyable story.

Amazing

Great work! All the mathematical jargon and sexual references aside, this could have easily been a scifi best seller!

Amazing!

Seriously, when I first saw that this story was 110 pages long, I'd never thought I'd read it all. But you had me, and I enjoyed it very much! The way you can combine real world situations in outer spaces, future or other sci fi places, it's totally awesome! Thank you!

Great stuff, but...

It should be in the Novels/Novellas instead of illustrated section

!!!!!

OMG, my mind is blown! This story was so vivid and intricate, I just couldn't stop reading! The portrayal of emotions and thought processes was very well-written and added so much more to the plot. All of the dynamics of the human (and not-so-human) psyche were riveting. I have nothing but praise for you!

Seriously, I thought this would be just another "we're all that's left, let's have sex ALL the time" thing. This was amazing. I was very surprised, happily so! This is a beautiful story, full of interweaving intricacies and stories, blended well together to bring it to a whole separate level of reading. The math and architecture parts were a bit difficult to read through but it adds intelligence to the whole work. Well written and I hope you'll continue to write, either a sequel to this one or a whole new work.

GREAT JOB ON THIS

One of the best stories I've read in a while.

WOW

I know that all of the comments above me are nothing but praise, and you should publish this, but I wanted to chime in and agree. The world that you created was amazing. I didn't want this to end, and would love if nothing an epilogue, but you should really turn this into a series. I never thought I would find such an amazing read on literotica. You are an amazing writer, and while I did not understand a lot (any) of the math, it shows that you have knowledge of content, and that I admire. You should be published so that your gift can be shared.

Blown away

the best story I have read in a long time! This has been the cause of many late nights. Well done

Well done...

Well written; a real page-turner. Some of the math in here gets a little hairy, even for a math major in college, but cool concepts. Hard to imagine most of the characters were sharp enough to follow this.

Do you have a sequel in the works? Endless possibilities from where you left off...

AMAZING

The only way this could be better is if I could get it as an ebook! Love it

omfg

ive just finished reading this for the third time lol i read it once before about a year or so ago and was totaly captivated by the depth of the characters and the absolute beauty of the world you created. "a real page turner" is a monumental understatement
this story a pure diamond in the rough for literotica i enjoyed most of the sex scenes and you did a very good job portraying how cruel people really can be too eachother i hope to read some more of your works in the future

Just. Wow.

Amazingly Lovely Series. i admist i started it for the "illistraded sex" i thought would appear, but when i started realy reading it i got hooked on how real and captivating it was, then i noticed the lovely 100+ pages. i must say see if you could get this and/or a series published! if you have read the "ghost" Or most commonely called Paladin Of Shadows series by John Ringo you know this could be published even as it is now, theres so much more that could be done and feel so real in this it would be a shame for it to only hide here!

Length Intrigues me, Content captivates me

I thoroughly enjoyed this story. Though it was lengthy, I decided to make use of the bookmarks in my browser to save my place and return to the captivating story whenever my schedule blessed me with such time. I rate this 100% because though the quantity of pages is a lot, the quality of each of the 110 pages is remarkable.

Wrong category!

I scrolled through 25 pages before losing patience: the only illustrations so far were 3 maps!

After that I just jumped to the end to give a 1 bomb and this comment.

Under a different category, this might have been worth reading - I don't know.

As an Illustrated story, it sucks, big time!

Pull it all and resubmit under a different category is what I say.

f5

This is so much more than sex, bravo!

I started this just browsing lazily through the illustrated sex hall of fame but very soon came to realize it was so much more than that. This is a deeply and intricately constructed story that stands on its own merits - I found it reminiscent of Larry Niven's Ring World, but in some ways much more original and clever. I thoroughly enjoyed the details of this puzzle world and the sense of unfolding discovery as the story progresses. I really, really do not understand complaints about length or chapters.

Excellent!

This story is truly a gem, if this where a print book, i would buy it in a heartbeat, i sat down for a erotic story, but found so much more... Truly, excellent work!

Thank You, Very Much

A wonderful story, and a great piece of fiction. I would definitely love a copy of this story to add to my library. It is definitely a story I will want to re read

Wonderful and gripping

I thought this was a great story and I had a hard time putting it down. I liked it being all in one and not have different chapters because it seems to break up the flow. The imagery was outstanding and I could feel myself there and seeing the wonders of this unique world frankly by page 4 I was hooked. I thought the blend of syfy and survival issues/instinct were compelling and very surreal.

A Great Read

Found the story compelling and had to read to the end. Found the future aspects interesting.

110 pages on a porn site?

What a waste.

110 pages on a porn site?

Oh, yes, excellent read. And yes, more than just a passable plot, interesting details, etc. Decent writing style, well-developed diction, and an interesting grasp of mathematics and physics (formed as a hobby, maybe?). I think that's just what this website needs more of.... :P

P.S. Actually, this would make a decent book. You may want to consider publication if you get any more bright ideas.

Go **** some ************ *** all ppl who rated this zero

On behalf of all these stupid comments I apologize to you hammingbyrd7.
This is a great work of literature. Your words don't deserve this petty stage of a porn site. When I opened this book I had no idea it would have such a deep understanding and truth bound in it. You should mind my advice and truly go to an publisher and present this. The people who rated this zero have truly not read it or understood the time and effort put into such a long story Two thumbs up for you.

And to finish my last comment

The world loves you hammingbyrd - whoever you are. Keep on writing and the non mental will keep on reading XOXOXOXOXOXOXOXOXOXOXOXOXOXOXO... - a giant fan

110 pages?

Not exactly what I was expecting. Could be a good movie. Definitely not a place for it on this site.

A really captivating adventure

Love the story!!!
Did not want it to stop...
You should try to get published!!

Take several of your stories here and publish as an anthology!

I do love your work, this and the tesseract stories are some of the better science fiction I've read anywhere, and that includes Heinlein, Asimov and Bradbury among those with whom I compare your work.

The only legitimate complaints I would have shared about this (the length is nothing, so ignore those fools complaining about it, though perhaps the marketing/categorization comments have some merit - perhaps consult someone with some SEO-type skillsets to help in this area going forward?) are about the ending seeming so slap-dash as compared to the rest of this fine bit of artwork.

I did also agree a little bit about the proffered advice from someone else to put a woman reviewer/editor/co-author on your team to help you as a sounding-board for the female side of relationship dialog sequences. The story could have benefited for a slightly wider cross-section of original party-goers too (in terms of ages/world-views/paths of study - a Lawyer's views on forming a government and/or a Historian's input would have been interesting to read).

While I found the puzzle-solving part of the story entertaining, reading through the mathematical explanations of the solutions was a little dry - having them need to explain the answers to an average High-School Jock mentality would perhaps have made some of it either more entertaining or approachable to those who didn't grok the math so quickly.

my biggest wtf moment

i was getting into the first page but then i scrolled down and saw 110 pages... wow... just wow. i really wanted to finished reading the story but sadly i have a very short attention span and most likely end up dumping it halfway through :/

Rewrite and mainstream publish

Tone down the sex descriptions to the level of the romance genre (mainstream not literotica) and this would make a mainstream SF novel.

Just no words for it..

Yeah that was awesome... Your stories as a whole are by me considered the best on this site. This is my I don't know how manyith comment... There's usually one Fter every read... I agree that this doesn't belong on this site but mainly just because it means you aren't getting the appreciation for it. It really should be published. The length is no matter, the plot is absolutely vivid and lovable. There is a sense of righteousness present in all your books that makes them a joy to read. The characters' emotions are so pure. The mathematical concepts are an enrichment to the book, but it might need to be toned down a little, at point it detracts from the plot a very slight bit. Overall great story

This is the best. Even better the second time around

I simply love it. All 150 pages. I have just started reading it for the second time and it even better.

I keep checking back to see if there are any new installments but sadly no.

Hummingbirds other other essays are just as good I have read them all.

I think it could make a TV series. But I am not sure I would cut out the sex. It a great adult adventure. Maybe a radio play if the actors voices were chosen right. .

My only criticism is why is it listed under illustration and not Sci Fi?

PLEASE WRITE MORE...

In reply to some of the comments

Length is unimportant in a story as good as this. Ignore those who criticize the length.

Whilst I would have liked the Chapters to start on a new page, I am pleased it was not published as chapters. It is better as one submission.

As to the maths. I think this was fine. You did not have to understand or follow the maths but great if you do. It added a quality of insight to the characters all who were University undergrad and I found this to be intellectually challenging and refreshing.

It gives some insight into the Human spirit. If I was going to populate an arc to save humanity I would chose the brightest and best selection. And the age span of the characters was as I would expect for the situation. Each at the point of their intellectual and sexual development. If I was populating Mars I would want to send people in their Twenties or early 30's.

You can kill a good story by trying to fit the stereotype mold. I just want more and I want you to be yourself.

Your a master of your craft

Masterwork!!

I'd been systematically reading my way through your writing. And was ecstatic that I "stumbled upon" this incredible sci-fi story. I was really happy that you'd gifted a full length novel to us readers.

In some of your other stories I found the characters a bit flat but in this one you explore polar opposite characters in depth to good affect. You are also superb at describing complex ideas to lay people by using characters in the novel to explore the idea in more detail. And the drawing were rather helpful in places though now you could make 3D models rather quickly which would convey what you're trying to explain rather clearly.

I agree with a former comment that with some tweaking you could pitch this idea to a network for a sci-fi series.

Thanks again for such a wonderfully comprehensive story. Top drawer!

fucking liar

LIAR LIAR, this is not an illustrated story your lying sack of shit. list it appropriately

Bleh.

Made it 6 pages in before I gave up, and that was a feat in and of itself. Not erotic, not illustrated in the sense that the category implies, and plain not interesting. You're way too enamored with your idea of this architectural fantasy. It's poorly described and far fetched, and just plain boring. sort of like what 50 shades of grey was to Twilight, your story is to Rendezvous With Rama, except that Rama, of the four pieces of writing listed is actually worth reading. You are sorely in need of an editor.

29 Sept 2015 - Thank you!

I kind of stumbled into finding this story, and I became very addicted to finishing it. It seems this was the last story you submitted some six and a half years ago, but thank you for sharing this story. From the effort and concentration you needed to complete this story, I hope some publisher or movie producer has provided you with a seven figure income to continue your art of writing!
Lesbian Lumberjack

WTF

Just looking for some casual stroke reading this day after Christmas, something relaxing, hopefully mildly entertaining, and erotically stimulating. Don't remember how I wound up here, but when I saw it is 110 pages, I've spent more time bitching here than I did trying to get into reading this. Hardly seems to fit this site.

Wonderful gift

Thank you for your story. It had me captivated and i read every word over hours and hours! Totally not what I expected to find, i honestly think if you tightened up some of the desciptions and toned down some of the sex you could publish this to great aclaim, its such a facinating concept. Im sorry about some comments you've received, they obviously didnt read the story and see the irony in their hateful intent!

I guess I expect a bit more of the human race, and I not talking the characters.

I've been reading Lit stories since shortly after its' debut and one thing has stayed consistent: people are bitching whiners, (for you Brits: whingers, or how ever you spell it). It's too long, it's too short, you've publishing too much at once, you don't publish often enough. Holy effing Christ on a crutch, STFU, you mealy-mouth, complaining, self-centered fucks!

Here's some helpful advice to the complainers:

-- You don't want long stories, take your hand off your dick long enough to scroll to the bottom of the page and check the length, (having a bit of experience with the differences in male and female perspectives, I would bet not one of the complainers is female.)

-- If you want stroke material, put some time into researching and choosing your stories, otherwise every story you choose is a crap shoot, hell porn is more straight forward, and there's certainly no shortage of that on the 'net.

-- My last suggestion might be a bit 'out there' for you, but bear with me on this one. If you get a paragraph or page into a story, and it isn't what YOU thought it was, or it isn't ringin' your bell, well... how do I put this... FIND SOMETHING ELSE! You didn't pay anything for it, you only invested a bit of your time. If you're in that big of a hurry to crank one out, why the fuck are you using written material?!? (see first two suggestions)

There I feel better, and based upon YOUR philosophy, that's all that matters. So, if you don't like or agree with me, fuck off, it wasn't for you. It was for me.

(Since Ham is long gone from this place, I won't even both with the praise this incredible piece of amateur writing deserves.)

horrible

Terrible give up writing and get a job.

It was good reading

I like this one it was long but kept my attention. I wanted to kill quite a few of the bad guys which I assume the writer wanted.

So sad...

I have chosen to submit this comment as Anonymous, rather than as my Member name, as I don't wish to deal with the hurt feelings and emails of those who may feel insulted. Been there, done that. No thanks.

It is so sad that far too many of the comments are about story length, story classification (Illustrated), and submission form. This is a free site! You have paid nothing for the chance to be titillated, aroused, and even entertained! Perhaps you're familiar with the old saying "Don't look a gift horse in the mouth." It is most apt for those complaints. For those whose comments were, to be charitable, less intellectual and more scatological, the saying "Don't throw pearls before swine" seems to fit best.

It is blindingly obvious to all regular readers that there are few writers submitting to Literotica whose work actually rises to the status of literature. Hammingbyrd7 is one of those few. I have read all of his submissions to Literotica over the years and his work is so much better than almost all of the other submissions here. He has genuine talent! He can interweave multiple plots, create believable characters, write dialogue that doesn't sound stilted, and create sex scenes that are as emotional as they are titillating.

Does his work contain flaws? Certainly. But Literotica is a great place to work out the kinks (Sorry, I just couldn't resist that!) in one's writing style and sharpen one's skills. He has. Those of us who have read his submissions here have been privileged to watch a budding craftsman in his journeyman years. I would like to think that he hasn't submitted anything since 2009 because he has found a traditional publisher who appreciates his unique blend of science, philosophy, and sex enough to pay him. I would like to think that very much. But I also can't help but wonder if the scathing and pointless criticisms of his work hasn't simply discouraged yet another promising writer...

Baffled

Not by the story.... Although some places confused me, with science that I could not follow, the story was masterful. I simply can't understand why so many readers have made negative comments. Maybe they simply can't comprehend anything more intricate than a quick jerk off read. Yes the story was very long but so well told that on more than one night I passed out while reading because I wanted to know what came next but my body wouldn't cooperate. Maybe one day this brilliant writer will return and tell us a little more about this society. Maybe he will write another story for our reading pleasure. Maybe he has gone on to be published and is now being paid to create such intricately woven stories. If so I hope I'll get the chance to read some of the published work.

Truly Awful

The writing on this story is painfully bad. The author is clearly in love with his own voice and has a deep and abiding hatred of the English language. I've seen more concise and well-written stories from high school writing classes. The plot, if it can be called that, is convoluted and I'll-conceived. I can't begin to fathom how someone could unironically enjoy this dreck.

Just reread this...

I don't know why people are so negative. The author has done an extraordinary job of weaving an incredibly complicated story together. I can find some major flaws as well (too many characters, for one thing) but the story itself is creative, unique, and well displayed. I think that with an editor this could easily become a best-selling series. I don't know why it's being wasted on ungrateful readers on an erotica site.