It's My Party

Thank You

This really is not an "erotic" story in the traditional sense. Yes, there's some sex in many forms, but it's really a soap opera, mystery, techno-thriller, science fiction piece all rolled in to one. Very well done. I have read a lot of books I found far less addictive.

Is the story long? Yes. Is it too long? Well, I didn't want it to end...so..NO.

Publish it!

I hearby Request a Hardcover book! Fantastic Read!

:D

I've never left a comment, but damn, this was good. Thank you. And don't go to chapters.

WOW

I hate to read, but I couldn't stop with this one...amazing

Outstanding

Read it the third time. Fantastic work, can't wait for your next story!

I can't even tell you how good this story was. Your grasp of numbers and inventiveness, the level of detail, it's astounding. thank you for writing this.

Wow

I've never commented on a Literotica story before. I've never had to. But this, this fascinating labyrinth of a story, has inspired me to write. The details, the new universe that hammingbyrd has lovingly provided us are the best piece of storytelling I've read on this site. There's not enough sex, sure -- and most of the sex is too violent to really be arousing for my states -- but the captivating setting and the mathematical precision to it all was enough to keep me from sleeping many nights this last week. I loved the mystery! And there aren't too many typos, either! I think an earlier commenter made a great point about the reveal being a little too early and the unresolved issue of the 17 blue mall women too glaring. I've known some pretty disgusting frat boys in my time, but none of them compare to these. It feels like it was the easiest stereotype available in the college-age group around which your story revolves. And who are we kidding -- Mark is just kind of a pussy.

Actually, let's talk about Mark. He's the typical male hero in romantic literature. He's smart, handsome, manly and strong enough to be dangerous but an absolute softie when in comes to women and sex. He is surrounded by horny, beautiful coeds, and yet he possesses godlike patience in turning away their plentiful advances. This is why I found his character to be unbelievable. He's too perfect -- he lacks any sort of masculine sexual aggression, any sort of reason for the women surrounding him to be afraid. He's too gentle, too perfect; he is the embodiment of feminine fantasy. You could swap his character traits and personality for any number of masculine romantic heros and hardly tell the difference. And that, sadly, is to the detriment of the story. I wanted to see Mark valiantly fuck all the women around him -- this would be an easy way to inject more prurient sex into the story if you wanted this to be a piece of erotic fiction.

This story is not perfect, but I loved it. I loved the sci-fi aspect way more than I loved the characters, but that is minor. One more thing about people complaining about the length of the story: I loved it. It sort of brought me into the story in the same way the characters walked into the Castlewealth Commons -- expecting a quick, fun party, but instead entering an incomprehensible labyrinth with no end in sight. As I read 20, 30 pages, I started to wonder what I had gotten my self into, and it wasn't until page 40 when I finally took the time to realize I wasn't even halfway done. And I read it all with pleasure.

I'm going to read the rest of your stories, hammindbyrd. Thanks for this!

can anyone read such a long story?????????

can anyone read such a long story?????????

i am surprised...........

Great story. Possibly in the wrong category?

I honestly cannot comprehend the people saying the story is too long. What's wrong with you people? This story was interesting from front to back. Occasionally finding epic stories like this is the only reason I visit this site - the short masturbatory tales which are apparently popular here are of no interest to me. It could have been in a different category, however. Perhaps Sci-Fi?

I've read most of your stories, and thoroughly enjoyed them - especially the long ones. Your writing style is unique (lots of information, mathematical details, etc) and takes a little getting used to, but I've come to look forward to it when I read your stories. You're a great writer. I can't wait for your next epic story, and I hope it's just as long as this one.

Keep it up!

Superb story

This is a very well-written and thought provoking story. I hope that you are able to get some of your work published.

One continuity error: On page 20 (as the story is formatted for this website) you say the following:

At the end of Green Mall was a terminal food store identical in size to the one in Red Mall, but having a more European selection of foods.

Every other occasion after this, you refer to the green mall terminal store as the Hilton Conference Center.

Keep up the superb work!

Thank You hammingbyrd7

Like several people above, I've never commented on a literotica story before, but this was a wonderful read. I've just finished it for the second time, having originally read it months ago, but it's stayed on my mind. The characterization and violent sexual depiction were not to my personal tastes, but the world-building and the unfolding of each stage of the plot were genuinely excellent by any standard. Thank you for offering your work to use hammingbyrd7, I sincerely hope you have good fortune getting published if that is one of your goals.

Epic...

Great story! Thoroughly enjoyable!

wonderful read

wow, that was an amazing story, it took a while to read but it was worth it! i wish it didn't end just there though, part two would be nice lol

Impressive. One of the best reads ever!

I am disheartened by the early slams that this story received. In a way I guess I can understand their disappointment in expecting one thing and getting something else. But when the something else is so much more that what I was expecting I usually rejoice just as I am now.

I accidentally tripped over this story and I have never read any of your other work but I found this story to be exceptional, thrilling, riveting, a masterful stroke of the pen... I could go on and on with my praise. If it had been a paperback I doubt I would have put it down. As it was, my most difficult challenge was finding my place when I switched from my desktop to my mobile phone. I solved that very quickly simply by reading to the end of a page on one device and finding the next page on the other device. Throughout the entire story I kept thinking that I would love to see James Cameron or Peter Jackson make a movie out of this story. My imagination and math ability simply aren't adequate enough to really piece this world together visually in my mind. I wish the illustrations had included some landscapes , room layouts or faces.

To find such a well thought out story with characters that are carefully developed with so many layers and so much depth is what i expect of published works that i pay for; yet I am still often disappointed in what I actually get for my money. You are the type of author that i would watch for and wait on "pins and needles" for your next book. Getting this kind of quality for free is far beyond my expectations.

For those who complained about the length... get a life. You don't have to read anything here and it is ridiculous to judge something you didn't read. After reading the story, I believe that it would have gotten more favorable exposure under the Sci- Fi category. I have read hundreds of stories here and very few have kept me so well captivated. I will be forwarding the link to this story to other sci-fi readers whom i hope will appreciate it as much as i did. I hope that at some point you will tell us more of what happened with the colony and how they handled their meeting with the beings who exterminated Earth.

This story definitely deserves the 5 rating i gave it. I hope you will choose to ignore the negative reviews and keep posting here as well as seek to be published in print and convert to TV/film

AMAZING

blackgold says it all. this story is amazing.... honestly, getting this for free is almost a crime. i loved this story hopefull you can get this published, it's well deserved! i'm on my second read, and i would still buy this book! thank you for this, its been fun!

Fantastic.

I almost wish that you hadn't posted it here, so that you could publish it! The story was so complex and rich! I admit, the architecture talk did get a little tedious at times, but I suppose it was necessary to really understand how the place was laid out, and that was important to the plot. Some of the sex scenes were a little confusing, especially the uterus talk... I don't usually feel anything in mine, perhaps other women are different? It was a little jarring when you mentioned a cervix being dialated—typically that is pretty painful.
However, your writing was so good, and your story so compelling, that I continued reading even though it involved graphic depictions of rape, which I usually avoid like the plague. The end was fantastic—it really wrapped up the mystery and yet left a little behind for the imagination. Thanks for the great read!

Wow

I'm so stunned by this I almost don't know what to write. This is so amazing. The Scope, the characters, everything is so amazing. And really touching. I almost shed tears for saphires sacrifice.

AMAZING STORY

So long I thought I wouldn't finish it for a few days. I finished in 2! The writing was captivating. The characters drew you in, the multiple threads/plots were just great. In my favs to read again and again. Can't wait to check out the rest of your writing!

Brilliant!!!!!

u are a brilliant writer!!!!..... i havent seen another story so well developed and amazingly written..... usually when we read a long story here it starts to get boring once we get to the middle or towards the end...but ur story......it kept me at the end of my seat for days right till the end!!!!......ur a genius man....keep up the excellent work..

Wonderful

With the exception of the miutia about the "jump rings" that was soooooo redundant, I think it's a great story. Too bad for those of us reading who are "only human" and don't understand some of the gruelling mathematical details, the essence of the story remains.

A great story from an amazing author

Wow! I thought I'd never get to the end of this story! I started reading it before Literotica would tell you the total number of pages in a story, and it just kept going and going - but that's a good thing! I always wondered what would be revealed next and how things would turn out. It was truly a great story. I won't go into much detail with that point, or this review will never end. I will say that the characters were excellent (even if the darker ones were more disturbing), and the plot made sense. It would be very interesting to see a sequel to this - I'm interested how far-off future events would unfold.

I've read a number of your stories, and they all seem to have the same theme running through them: broken humanity, a minority that chooses better, struggles against evil. I say this because, oddly enough, I've learned a lot about God and love through your writings ("oddly enough" because this is Literotica). And I've made better choices in my life because I've seen love in action and how people can choose to consider others ahead of themselves. A simiple "Thank you" doesn't suffice, so I'll add: Keep writing!! You have great talent.

thank you

wow - I was really caught up with the story. I didn't get all the math - maybe a few more pictures of the structures with the different colours of the mall would have helped. But totally loved it.
You should get it published : )

Thank you again

Thank you.

What an amazing story, I found it purely by chance as I've never looked at the Illustrated section before. You lost me on some of the mathematical descriptions but what a great story.

WOW ! Great SiFi / Adventure tome !

This should be published. Could even be the "Foundation" for a great series, or even a serial !

An other great read

I just wanted to join all those who praise this story. A great read, lovely story, page-turner (or is it screen scroller). No problem to read to the end, that happened more or less by itself.

Awesome!

Really a great story.

AWESOME DUDE!!

The story was too fucking good! Just the perfect blend of sci fi and eroticism! And I totally agree with the others who said so..you seriously should get this published!

Wonderful idea

Thank you so much for that engrossing story. You have a fantastic imagination.

I actually read this for the story, not the sex. I pretty much skipped all the sex parts. I kinda got tired of everyone "petting". For me, that word describes how we touch our pets, not how we touch our equals.

A Great suprise of writting quality with a great storey line, Five Star. Bring on the Movie

You deserve payment for this storey it was remarkable. I Will check out your other writting for sure. I coppied and pasted this comment.
"What an amazing story, I found it purely by chance as I've never looked at the Illustrated section before." Same here, I was so lucky !
Really enjoyed the Storey, my wife was wondering what the hell was going on, I couldn't stop reading, I'm usually a short storey reader. Litrotica should seek a film company to produce a R but better still a x movie with a big name director, you'd create a block buster. Cheers and thanks for great read, much appriciated.

Awesome!

I loved all the development. It's like Hunger Games meets Cube meets Inception. Amazing!

omfg

i started reading this in the middle of the night thinking it was going to be a 5 page erotic, generic story. please for the love of all that is good, publish this and make yourself some money from this becAuse this has been one of the best works I've read. literotica should not be the place you present this. it's just too good! I'd complain about length but in reality, th audience you have presented it to is for people used to reading 5 minute insta orgasms. I love your style and keep on writing dear!

Brilliant!

So pleased I stumbled on this. Best story I've read on here!

pleasantly surprised

This was absolutely fabulous. I was expecting a two page sex scene. But as I kept reading I realized this was way better than I could have hoped for. I agree with the idea that you shpuld get this published. it is most definitely worthy I think. Keep it up.

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Very well wwritten. I ccouldnt stop reAading.

Wow

Let me just say, I usually use this site for a quick thrill and save my length reading for books and things of that nature. I don't think I've ever read anything longer than 5 pages on this site. I found your story in the Illustrated Hall of Fame in the new menu set-up. I read the very first page, groaned when I saw it was 110 pages, read the 2nd page and couldn't put it down again. I honestly believe if you toned down the sexuality to something at least R-rated (there wasn't that much anyway considering it's a 110 page Literotica story), you could have an NYT Best Seller on your hands that could get turned into a movie. I read a lot, and this is one of the most fantastic stories I have ever read. Thank you.

Oh....

I, like the others enjoyed the read mostly. The descriptions of the layout are too complex and too wordy. I gathered pretty early on the this wasn't going to be the usual 'sex fest' but I did feel the ending was too abrupt after having invested so much time in the characters.

A bit like one of those 3 hour movies where you expect it to all tie up at the end yet all of a sudden you are watching the credits an feeling a bit empty.

Overall: needs cuts and improved illustrations - brilliant ideas!

Intelligent setting

Dear hammingbyrd7,
I find the setting of your story (and not only this one) truly astounding. The stettings and plots, the way you use our created world to carry deeper sense is absolutely professional.
The science and math involved might not be everyones favorite but keep it up. It is definitely one of your assets and there are certainly those who enjoy it and if someone does not understand it they can just skip it like I am skipping some of the sex scenes.
In my humble opinion on the micro level there is some polishing to be done, especially on the dialogues between your otherwise quite plastic characters. These are sometimes repetitive and monotonous.
Over all I believe that some rework, some polishing would make this a story well worth publishing. I would buy it anyway. There is certainly published books of much lesser promise than this work.
For a free story however this is better and more than anyone can ask for.
About publishing the story in one big chunk: thanks for that! Reading mostly on a mobile device I really hate navigating around on the website to find the next chapter I like this much better and besides: dont people have some self respect and can decide for the selves when to stop reading or even if they want to read something or not. Adults should be able to take some responsibility for what they do.
Keep up the work. 5 stars!
Luckily I am only half through your stories so far.
Thanks for many pleasant hours,
K.

Couldn't stop reading.

Thank you for posting this all as one long story, instead of splitting it up into chapters. All I had to do was to remember what page I was on when I took a break from reading, instead of hunting for the next chapter online. The story was fascinating and so creative. I've never read anything like it. I hope you will someday consider publishing a toned-down version (fewer vulgar/ detailed rape scenes to appeal to people that would never read literotica). People need to read it! :)

The helluva Story.

Nice Story bro.
The hell!

Like The Vinci Code Story or somethin. .

Hope you make a book of it bro.
I guarantee, IT WILL BE A BIG HIT!

=)

Simply amazing

The first time I read one if your stories I was looking for something sexy with plots. However sex with plot is a rarity. The math and science was a bit overwhelming and to be honest I don't recall most of that information. I was really surprised at the length of the story and the ending was abrupt. But it cleared many of the questions up but left even more. I would like to see more of this universe you created perhaps jump 20 years and introduce more detailed characters. You did a great job on all of it but I was not a big fan of the graphic death scenes. Keep up the good work. Now to find another of your stories.

nice

Very detailed and imaginative. Didn't get all of the math bits but I'm sure a lot of thought and effort came in to the story.
Well done !

Absolutely fantastic! Interesting use of metric measures for US students but it works. Keep up the great work!

Unbelievable

This was a truly amazing novel. The amount of effort and detail that went into its making just boggles my mind. PLEASE publish this. You deserve the appreciation that publishing this story will bring you.

I have never seen anything close to such a detailed vision. Reading your masterpiece was both a challenge and a delight.

Thank you for taking the time to craft this unbelievable story!

wow!!

Publish this!!! amazing! i couldnt stop reading it!!!!

Get this published!!!!

This universe you have created is as made fore a hardcover book. I can see this novel being the first book in a long series of books. You could easily create a fortune on book series based on this.

The story could be needing some cleaning up to be published but i think that could be easily done. If done i think this could be the next Foundation.

P.S I see that you hasnt written anything in a while. If you has stopped writing it's a loss for the world. If you hasnt stopped I think everybody would appreciate a comment from you commenting our comments.

Don't stop writing

Brilliant story, don't skip a page

This story is deeply engrossing, intellectually stimulating, and richly detailed both in terms of setting and character. I've been reading through Hammingbyrd7's stories one at a time, and I would describe all of them in those terms. The action, the puzzles, and the suspense of trying to figure out what will happen would have kept me reading for another 110 pages. "It's My Party" should definitely be published.

Surprising!

I was certainly not expecting to read this type of a story when I came across this website, or that I would become completely engrossed in it. Very well written. I agree with some of the other comments, this story if you have the drive could be a successful series, and I'd definitely be in line to buy a copy. Keep up the excellent imagination.

UNUSUAL WITH BROAD TOPICS fast paced and surprises at every turn

Publish!

Please publish and create a sequel please!!

Brilliant!

I've only read up to page 10, and I'm completely captivated.
I don't see the problem other people have with everything being in one huge chunk, it's a lot easier to have everything in one story. I will definitely keep reading until the last word.