by UnderYourSpell
You did a great job of getting the flowers and corpses line in it in a unique way that fits the theme of the poem really well. I think the poem would be well-served by breaking it into two or three sections--it wouldn't feel like you're covering so much territory in such a small space then--but in all honesty I don't remember whether it's ok to do that with a blank verse poem, so I say it with some reservations. But it's really good, beautifully written.