All Comments on 'Closer Ch. 01'

Nice beginning. I'd like to see where this goes. Characters could use a little more dimension, but overall it a great start. Keep writing.

I loved this from the beginning. Can't wait to see how this progresses. Maybe a bit longer chapters next time too? Awesome start here

I think it was a great start! I understood all of it so I'm not sure what the other person was referring to. Keep up the good work.

I loved it although there were some mistakes but I read your profile and you said you're re-submitting. Anyway I'm really interested in what's gonna happen with Justin and Kim.

among a few other relatively minor things, I'm having a little difficulty with the idea that Justin thinks Kim is too good for him. Why would he think that? After all, he just found out that she got drunk and was about to have sex with some random guy right before he interrupted the situation.

So what did the evil Mackenzie put in her drink? Thanks

Mackenzie slipped Kim Rohypnol or a roofie. Its this date rape drug that causes you to black out or become confused and then eventually you can't remember ANYTHING that happened. It's not a fun experience. I should know. On another note this is a really good story. And that swing part in chapter 2 was infamous. You have pure talent girl. Keep it up

Your story is really good so far and I want to read more about Kim and Justin. The plot is cool and suspenseful. I hope you keep writing.

friendship turn relationships last a long time, due to knowing that person on a personal, emotional and psychological level at the same time.

Great beginning!! I would love to see where this story goes!!