Reading it wasn't that bad, but the style of the story was a little unfamiliar and very brief. It leaves many questions unanswered like how did she notice his spying, what let her to this reaction, where's the logic in it, what happend to bra and panties, when will they do it again,..?
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Anonymous03/02/09
This Probably Really Happened -- Too Bad
5' 8" and 175 pounds? Quite a BEEFER! And this reads like something that really happened to someone who DESERVES to get the shit work at the fast food place. I'm not feelin' it, dawg.
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Anonymous03/02/09
ANOTHER EXAMPLE of WHY Literotica Needs Standards!
Inane storyline!Pathetic effort!!Ridiculous writing style!!!Stick to comic books!!!!
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Anonymous03/03/09
Ugh...
Any author who has a son refer to his mother as a bitch during or after he screws her does not gain my respect. Lousy piece of crap from beginning to end!
It seems that the author just rushed to get to the extreme sex scenes, and that was the only point of the story. There wasn't any time spent trying to develop the characters or reason for their actions, other than being caught masturbating. The story wasn't believable is the only fault I can read. I do think there is passion is in the author to write erotic stories, if the time is taken to build a background in the story, that will make the reader feel that they are reading a factual story. Write another story and make the reader feel that they are there, watching the son making love to his mother. Thanks for the post....Rich
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Anonymous08/03/09
Its so boring.
It never ever gave me a hardon for reading this piece of wastage non usable dump
I am sorry - this actually started off quite well. Then this quite nice fellow starts calling someone he apparently 'loves' a 'bitch'. Strange. Went from ok to dreadful in one easy step!
I am sorry - this actually started off quite well. Then this quite nice fellow starts calling someone he apparently 'loves' a 'bitch'. Strange. Went from ok to dreadful in one easy step!
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Anonymous06/03/12
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omg loved it
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Anonymous01/10/13
rubbish
Wat a pile of 1st class sh*t...no writing style cheesy dialogue.total waste of the minute i spent reading it.
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Anonymous02/16/13
Bag of sh*t
Dude, or dudett. Come on. Seriously? What a pile of shit. Like this would ever happen. Learn to write.
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Anonymous04/21/13
no, this is a pretty good story by a guy around...
30 years old. This dude should be encouraged to explore his wonderfully dirty imagination when it comes to boys and their moms messing around. I like when the writer says that the mother "got ready to perform her "duty" as she called it." I firmly believe that it absolutely is a loving mother's duty to suck off her boy when he is in need. At his age he's got to unload his balls several times a day, and it's demeaning for the lad to have to jerk his young prick like a 13 year old. A mom who really cares for her boy will make her warm motherly mouth available for all the warm creamy semen he's got in his young balls. Besides, it's mostly protein, real good for his mommy's system.
From the way you started it, I wouldn't have expected the sex scenes to be so.... Unrealistic. Didn't get me horny. I had to many questions going through my mind about what exactly was happening and why. Sorry, nice try though.
Why bring nastiness into it?
"So much love and passion was involved....." and then you tell her she's a bitch and slap her!
Apart from that, everything happened far too quickly to believe.
Prefacing a story by saying it's fictional, not the best move in my opinion. Some odd phrasing. He came for five minutes?? I realize we're talking fantasy here, but that impossibility sort of slams me out of it. Now saying " I came long and hard, painting her tits", that's plausible. Just saying..
English
Too much work
Very awkward writing. Too clumsy to enjoy.
Undecided
Reading it wasn't that bad, but the style of the story was a little unfamiliar and very brief. It leaves many questions unanswered like how did she notice his spying, what let her to this reaction, where's the logic in it, what happend to bra and panties, when will they do it again,..?
This Probably Really Happened -- Too Bad
5' 8" and 175 pounds? Quite a BEEFER! And this reads like something that really happened to someone who DESERVES to get the shit work at the fast food place. I'm not feelin' it, dawg.
ANOTHER EXAMPLE of WHY Literotica Needs Standards!
Inane storyline!Pathetic effort!!Ridiculous writing style!!!Stick to comic books!!!!
Ugh...
Any author who has a son refer to his mother as a bitch during or after he screws her does not gain my respect. Lousy piece of crap from beginning to end!
I feel the story was rushed
It seems that the author just rushed to get to the extreme sex scenes, and that was the only point of the story. There wasn't any time spent trying to develop the characters or reason for their actions, other than being caught masturbating. The story wasn't believable is the only fault I can read. I do think there is passion is in the author to write erotic stories, if the time is taken to build a background in the story, that will make the reader feel that they are reading a factual story. Write another story and make the reader feel that they are there, watching the son making love to his mother. Thanks for the post....Rich
Its so boring.
It never ever gave me a hardon for reading this piece of wastage non usable dump
Oh dear ...
I am sorry - this actually started off quite well. Then this quite nice fellow starts calling someone he apparently 'loves' a 'bitch'. Strange. Went from ok to dreadful in one easy step!
Oh dear ...
I am sorry - this actually started off quite well. Then this quite nice fellow starts calling someone he apparently 'loves' a 'bitch'. Strange. Went from ok to dreadful in one easy step!
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omg loved it
rubbish
Wat a pile of 1st class sh*t...no writing style cheesy dialogue.total waste of the minute i spent reading it.
Bag of sh*t
Dude, or dudett. Come on. Seriously? What a pile of shit. Like this would ever happen. Learn to write.
no, this is a pretty good story by a guy around...
30 years old. This dude should be encouraged to explore his wonderfully dirty imagination when it comes to boys and their moms messing around. I like when the writer says that the mother "got ready to perform her "duty" as she called it." I firmly believe that it absolutely is a loving mother's duty to suck off her boy when he is in need. At his age he's got to unload his balls several times a day, and it's demeaning for the lad to have to jerk his young prick like a 13 year old. A mom who really cares for her boy will make her warm motherly mouth available for all the warm creamy semen he's got in his young balls. Besides, it's mostly protein, real good for his mommy's system.
Was a bit rushed and had no emotion.
From the way you started it, I wouldn't have expected the sex scenes to be so.... Unrealistic. Didn't get me horny. I had to many questions going through my mind about what exactly was happening and why. Sorry, nice try though.
Language!
Why bring nastiness into it?
"So much love and passion was involved....." and then you tell her she's a bitch and slap her!
Apart from that, everything happened far too quickly to believe.
Prefacing a story by saying it's fictional, not the best move in my opinion. Some odd phrasing. He came for five minutes?? I realize we're talking fantasy here, but that impossibility sort of slams me out of it. Now saying " I came long and hard, painting her tits", that's plausible. Just saying..
We know it is fiction
No need to tell us that this is fictional, baldy.
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