Though my sweet little step-daughter was not a virgin...NOR did she beg to be fucked.............but I have a lot of memories of the time in her bed, fucking her while her mom was at work.....We both kept the secret..........ahh yes the sweet memories.............This story reminded me of her....a sequel would be good!
I rated this 5 Stars because of how dirty, forbidden, and well written it was. I saw each part of this story like a movie. I stayed up late just to finish reading. I might become a step dad just to reenact this story. My new fantasy. Big UPs to Author!
Wish in my younger years I had a stepdad that fuked me like that...hot, hot.
This Story Is Very Arousing And Entertaining. =] Good Job.!
HOLY CRAP!!!!!!! What is wrong wit u people
It's like it's written somewhere between third-person and first-person perspective. Very uncomfortable to read. I never got close to "losing myself in the story." Perhaps if you hooked up with a good volunteer editor here on Lit'?
Would love to have a step-daughter like that
Could use some work here and there but OMG this was a very arousing story.... makes me wish I had a stepdad named Zack..... Great Job!
WoW >> That was GREAT Thanks
My step daughter is too young still, but hell I can't wait until she's older, she's only 13 but has tried to feel me, and stroked my cock in the night when she has come into our bed I wake up and find her hands on my cock. She knows what she's doing and however wrong it is, what it does to me. In a few years time I know I will not be able to hold back and will have to fuck her hard!
I don't understand why there needed to be comparison between the daughter and mother in Zack's eyes thinking she fucked just like her mother. Since when do daughters inherit their fucking style or arrousal or whatever from their mothers? It isn't like leg legnth or hair color..... jeez. For me deflected from the story and dampened my enthusiasm. Sounds like belittling the mother which i didn't like and don't see the reason for this.
Second, an innocent virgin talking so dirty? I don't think so. She sounded more like a common slut than a virgin.
And third, him going straight for the ass? Uh uh.
For these reasons, i give this story a low score of 3 stars.
Try taking to heart what i wrote, u can still improve.
I think this is a great start, continue her story =)
Ridiculous dialogue, totally unreal, nobody speaks ike that in real life.
Absolutely horrible! Poor english to start with, then the asshole rapes her ass, then shoves his shit covered dick in her pussy giving her a septic infection, probably winding up with uterine cancer later and who knows what else.
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