Mall Sodomy

Very erotic

I have had fantasies of being female and something like an initiation such as this take place against me as well.

I love the excellent descriptions and the way the story continued to touch my erotic buttons. Almost could see exactly what was happening as they story unfolded.

Nice job!

Had to suspend too much reality ...

to really believe this story and get into it. I mean, a virgin? raped? orgasming multiple times? not being so terrified out of her mind she almost loses it? But the writing was good and I never sink a first-time writer. Hope your talent wanders to less violent passions in the future! I think I would enjoy them. :)

Great

Great story although not really into that type of story. It was well written.

Really liked your story

Great premise and good writing. I also liked that it wasn't too long. I hope we get to read some more of your fantasies in the future.

Fine Work

I loved the nice erotic tension you created here — I always enjoy stories with an element of force as well as the anal thing, which I find particularly hot.

The female insights add to the heat of the tale, too: for instance the detail how how she experiences the violation and the warmth of his cum in her ass.

Finally, the psychological tension is nicely drawn: her sense of ambivalence over her own pleasure and the manner in which she is torn between pain and pleasure.

Keep giving us the gifts of your imagination!

Good stuff. Some of your bundles of descriptive sentences get a little cluttered, but it's consistently understandable. Definite theme, which is always good- even when some people don't "get it" you can still feel good about writing it the way you wanted it.

I really enjoy your work. Feel free to shoot me a message when you get new stuff up.

Nasty and sick

No matter what, rape is rape. A very nasty story, left a bad taste in my mouth.

Epic

So awesome. Thank you for an amazing story!

Oh Bugger Off Anonymous "Nasty and Sick"

Don't like it, don't read it. It's a rape story, and its in the 'NonConsent/Reluctance' section, did you somehow pop int without knowing what kind of story it was, bugger off then if you hate it. LOAnnie2 keep it up, maybe do another installment about another teen girl, maybe a student or something.

Scotjock1

Other than the a2m...

I'm not a fan of the ass to mouth stuff, even in fantasy land but the rest of it was super hot. I hope you do another story about the ring that these guys are joining... it's definitely a good hook for a series!!!

it was kinda intense. i lov intense stories.

I liked it, but i personally thought it could have been even more intense. But hey, thars my taste. ;)

...Not sure...t

I'm not sure how to respond to this story. On the one hand, it involves one of my favorite fantasies: public sex. On the other hand, poor Melissa was tortured and analy raped. A well written story on a rather disgusting subject. I finally decided to grant you 4 **** based on the quality of your writing rather than that of your subject matter. ...And , yes, I do realize it's only fiction, but that is MY! story, and I'm sticking to it!
J'quas que ser!

Good story

I like it!