All Comments on 'Sensual Persuasion Ch. 03'

by haremhottie678

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 15 years ago
Ahaa..

Your story is really really good, the point of view thing gets a little confusing though. And It would be much more original if you didn't mention the designer wear the characters are dressed in. Its evident that they're classy, but mentioning the designers kinda makes it look like you're trying too hard to make the characters appear 'classier' otherwise, you rock.

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