All Comments on 'Anally Deflowering Sue:...Ch. 1'

by Powerone

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fakers51fakers51about 19 years ago
Awesome fucking

This is the third time I have read a chapter where anal is the prinary goal of the sex act. It usally came as an add on after ablow job and cunt fucking. But I will read some more anal stuff after reading this hot topic, by Powerone.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
technical

could have used a proofreader - lots of grammatical errors and such. also very "clinical," like a doctor describing what he's going to do. The part where he tells her everything he WILL do to her gives away the surprises in the story. And words like rectum and colon should be used very sparingly, in my opinion... they're just too technical. Just my opinion.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 16 years ago
Language, spelling, grammar!

Some grade nine English might help.

isubmit2uisubmit2uover 11 years ago
Consensual nonconsent

Great story! I love how he made her cum first and wouldn't stop until she did.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
i have shot my load

uurgghhhhhhhh........

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
Elementary english instruction needed, but I think it's too late.

"was tied to the bed rail, than the other"; "Only than will your fantasy end"

"It was over 8 inches long and 1-2 inches in diameter. " Quite the range to describe a single object - from wiener to genoa salami. Measurement challenged as well.

"each unmerciless thrust" . "merciless" means 'without mercy'. "unmerciless' would logically mean the opposite - merciful. Does this author even know what he/she means? It's like the regardless/irregardless/non irregardless stuff. I don't think the author even understands what I'm talking about .

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