Wow it took you a long time to write a lame sequel. Must have been challenging for you.
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Anonymous03/12/09
I liked it
Don't listen to the troll -- I thought the story had a great sense of realism. Thanks for sharing it.
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Anonymous03/12/09
Good
I like that it was short and to the point. And that it seemed realistic. Way too many of these stories are too long without saying much and way too unbelievable.
If it was me, I would have at least tried to have a peek in the backyard where the pool party was.
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Anonymous12/15/09
Realistic...
Having been a pizza delivery dude myself, this short account seems entirely realistic to me. I was never quite so fortunate, but this easily could have happened. This is also a great setup for a sequel - a return visit to the same house where things go just a bit further, perhaps?
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Wow it took you a long time to write a lame sequel. Must have been challenging for you.
I liked it
Don't listen to the troll -- I thought the story had a great sense of realism. Thanks for sharing it.
Good
I like that it was short and to the point. And that it seemed realistic. Way too many of these stories are too long without saying much and way too unbelievable.
If it was me, I would have at least tried to have a peek in the backyard where the pool party was.
Realistic...
Having been a pizza delivery dude myself, this short account seems entirely realistic to me. I was never quite so fortunate, but this easily could have happened. This is also a great setup for a sequel - a return visit to the same house where things go just a bit further, perhaps?
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