A very fine first story miss. Needs tighter editing in places, but you could be very good indeed. You have the right touch...
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04/26/09
This is a good start
but the story is not complete. It's really the beginning of a much longer story it seems to me, but it IS a great start. Please write the next chapter! And keep writing! There is a great deal of sensitivity in your writing that reflects your fine poetic sense. Tap into that - and with a little editing finesse…oh my…
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awesome start
Great stuff - I hope he ends up breeding her!
intense
A very fine first story miss. Needs tighter editing in places, but you could be very good indeed. You have the right touch...
This is a good start
but the story is not complete. It's really the beginning of a much longer story it seems to me, but it IS a great start. Please write the next chapter! And keep writing! There is a great deal of sensitivity in your writing that reflects your fine poetic sense. Tap into that - and with a little editing finesse…oh my…
More please touchy_miss
Highly arousing!!!
More please!!
Xx
Next...
When is your next part to this story coming out? This is a beautiful and intensely erotic tale that yearns to continue.
The rest of the story
I wish you had finished this story .. it was such a good start
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