All Comments on 'I Made My Sister Ch. 01'

Way Too Short! Try to wait until you have more to write.

Giving it 50 as I think there could be a good story here. Also, it might be an idea to use these " " when the mother or son are talking. But make the next chapter longer !

This was my first submission. There are already 3 more short chapters awaiting approval. I now know to put more on one submission. Ta

I'm finding it interesting to have feedback which I do respect - even with spelling. I am actually English, and whilst I am the worlds worst at spelling I do know how to spell "mum" and "mummy". That's how those words are spelt in England.

I'll be watching to read about how he knocks up his mum. I love hot wet mom pussy,with her vaginal fluid running down the inside of her legs. you can't go wrong thinking about that. Thanks ......Rich

Although this first chapter had no sex in it, it has piqued my interest. I will have to continue reading to see what happens.

Try not to use mum use mom or mother it just sound weird

Unusual start but character and plot development off to a fair start.