by SmartyBluPants
Okay so its not MUCH longer but I had a busy week thanks to a certain special someone ;). Also I just got a new idea for a story and once I get started it doesnt stop. I've written the prologue and chapter one which is 20 pages long!! See I can write long chapters especially when I'm feeling inspired. I will continue with Never Cry Werewolf though so no worries. :)
but writing in the first person is really distracting to read. However still like the main characters and will follow their story.
i love that you made him appear so boyish at the end.. its a wonderful story so far keep more coming..
...Its not really writing in the first person (just to mention that to the comment two down), its writing from a narator POV in places, and standard 3rd person in others and that is the slightly confusing bit. It only takes away from the story a fraction, your characters are that good, and very very interesting to make up for it. Have a wee focus on your uses of tense and this story will be a 100% winner!
And oooooh a new story!! Look forward to seeing it up here!!
Wow your writing is really good and im really feelin the characters. Great story cant wait for the next chapter!
this is killing me! i love how you end the chapters with cliff hangers. it gets more and more tempting everytime.
Gosh! Nothing beats a bad boy!! Great chapter. Just too short.
OMG I'VE BEEN WAITING FOR THIS CHAPTER!! God this story is so compelling, please write soon!!
I am entranced with this story. I love when opposite attracts but yet try to fight the attraction. This is one of the best and I hope you update soon.
it could be so much better.
Please keep the comments written by Sacrificedangel in mind. Your tenses and the POV keeps shifting and it's distracting. HOWEVER this is a strong story and if you could sort these two things out then your stories would be fantastic.
Keep up the good work.
I honestly think that this story has awesome potential, however, the continuous, almost tourrete-like shift of tenses is highly irritating. I think that maybe you should get an editor to help you. And also, this chapter is repetitive of the first one, which is pretty much useless. Keep trying, i'm sure youll get better.
Is this not pretty much the same as the last part of chapter 1? The story is really interesting, but the POV switching can get to be cofusing.
Please let these guys keep living for us through your words. Great reading.
This story is off to a great start, I can't wait to see what comes next!
where is the rest of this storey wit the hell there should b more to this than just her meeting him at his [lace of bizzness get on ur job don't have ppl in limbo
why is never cry werewolf ch. 2 is the same as the end of ch. 1? i can"t wait for the next ch.
so is there going to be another chapter to this story i am liking it