Hot Summer Nights

Step Siblings

Perfectly normal....the same as a girlfriend/boyfriend. Maybe they need to start their own little family, complete with midnight feedings and diapers.

Verry nice

Very nice first story. A good story and enough left to the imagination.

Yes good for a start

Like other said good for a start, Details details make it long sound like some of my PASS lover get there rocks off
and go home or asleep, it was there first time make sound like it, was she shaved or what? was he hung like a horse?
like most of you like to write! did she have any tan lines,
it was more of a wam bam, you end it with in the pool again so leaves one thinking there not done witch was good but you should keep going and wrote more!

Sweetie, I hope that you write some more

It's a great first story, and I would like to read more on the two young people.You must have felt a lot of passion when you wrote it. The more you write and post the better you will become, and take the positive comments as a learning experence. Don't pay attention to the negative assholes who leave comments here, they couldn't write the word Bob backwards. The story was a little rushed and the characters need to be developed more to make the reader feel that they are real. Even if this was something that really happened, you still need to convince the reader that it really happened. I'll be watching for more of your work, and for a first time post, you done very well. Thank You for the good post.....Rich

and 9 months later......

such an ass

god he was such an asshole and way to dominating to close to a rape story FORCE IS NEVER ACCEPTABLE WHEN IT COMES TO SEX ESPECIALLY INCEST