That was a great story about a brother and sister getting together for the first time. The writing was erotic and sexual tension was throughout the whole piece. It was an easy read for me. I hope you write another chapter to this series and take a little further with them.
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Anonymous04/02/09
Pizza?
Where is it, and why is it part of this otherwise fine story?
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Anonymous04/02/09
Very Good!
Is it getting warm in here, or is it just me *blush* Brought back fond memories of my first time with my twin brother.
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Anonymous04/03/09
I agree, it's good.
Very well done. Thanks for a good read.
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Anonymous04/03/09
great first time
submission - keep the story going
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Anonymous04/03/09
Awesome
Very well written, I love your writing style. Looking forward to your next submission! :)
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Anonymous02/07/10
shades?
ever heard of closing the shades,curtains or blinds this is just as stupid as the stories where there are no locks on the doors what idiots if she was stupid enough to undress in front of an open window then she has no reason to bitch about being watched
Wow, what an amazing story. 10/10 it was brilliantly written and as a story a fantastic read, a type of story you could just imagine being apart of, involved in, like it was you in the story.
a truely Excellent bit of erotica.
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Anonymous09/12/13
Take your time!
Do not be so impatient to end the story. You were doing very well until the last couple of paragraphs. Then, it seemed you either did not have an ending or were in too much of a hurry to wrap-up the story. Otherwise, it was a nice job.
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Anonymous10/23/13
Rush Ending
I agree with the one comment I read. The ending is rushed although it's till a good story...
English
Very Hot!
This is a wonderfully written first story. The characters are believable. This is a good read!
Great Story!!
That was a great story about a brother and sister getting together for the first time. The writing was erotic and sexual tension was throughout the whole piece. It was an easy read for me. I hope you write another chapter to this series and take a little further with them.
Pizza?
Where is it, and why is it part of this otherwise fine story?
Very Good!
Is it getting warm in here, or is it just me *blush* Brought back fond memories of my first time with my twin brother.
I agree, it's good.
Very well done. Thanks for a good read.
great first time
submission - keep the story going
Awesome
Very well written, I love your writing style. Looking forward to your next submission! :)
shades?
ever heard of closing the shades,curtains or blinds this is just as stupid as the stories where there are no locks on the doors what idiots if she was stupid enough to undress in front of an open window then she has no reason to bitch about being watched
amazing
Wow, what an amazing story. 10/10 it was brilliantly written and as a story a fantastic read, a type of story you could just imagine being apart of, involved in, like it was you in the story.
a truely Excellent bit of erotica.
Take your time!
Do not be so impatient to end the story. You were doing very well until the last couple of paragraphs. Then, it seemed you either did not have an ending or were in too much of a hurry to wrap-up the story. Otherwise, it was a nice job.
Rush Ending
I agree with the one comment I read. The ending is rushed although it's till a good story...
I was wrong
Never mind my other post. I am an asshole.
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