Well written. But too contrived, too predictable. We never really got to know the two main characters. It had a lot of possibilities, but there should have been some surprises, a deviation or two from the obvious script.
I liked it. Maybe a little similar to other stories , but it was well written and enjoyable.
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Anonymous04/20/09
Very nicely done - fresh twist
Really liked this. A bit of an old hat situation treated with a very fresh approach that makes it sparkle. I like the Nefertiti touch. And very sexy when she gets down to it.
English
Didn't deliver
Well written. But too contrived, too predictable. We never really got to know the two main characters. It had a lot of possibilities, but there should have been some surprises, a deviation or two from the obvious script.
Tender story
I liked it. Maybe a little similar to other stories , but it was well written and enjoyable.
Very nicely done - fresh twist
Really liked this. A bit of an old hat situation treated with a very fresh approach that makes it sparkle. I like the Nefertiti touch. And very sexy when she gets down to it.
Very sweet
This was just very sweet. Don't know what else to say about it. I enjoyed it very much, so thanks. :)
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