The pace with which your story is progressing is great, though I'm sure there are others that may not agree,since some like a fast paced story. Looking forward to the next and future installments. Keep up the great work!
I hope that the story isn't only about their first
I hope that the concept of the whole story isn't to just end on Robb and Kris getting together for a good fuck. There's a lot more to tell after that. The true long lasting love that they could share, moving out of mom and dad's place into a place of their own. Kris becoming pregnant, and the couple telling everyone that they are going to be married. The story is really good and has a lot of life to be told yet. Thanks......Rich
If I'm the brother reading that letter, I'm thinking of telling the sister about our third option: We cut the bullshit. We don't need the others there, just to keep us "safe" from each other. We're going to do what we want to do, period. I don't want them, I want you, and you feel the same way about me. If you want to include them, fine, we'll all have at it, but we both know where this is going so let's shitcan the idea of using your friends as human shields. It's time to lose the artificial constraints.
If you insist on having them there with us, great. Let them watch us make love, because that's what we're going to do, whether they're there or not.
Know that, sis.
Great story so far.
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Anonymous04/09/09
EXCELLENT
I agree...most people do like a fast paced story. However, I think this one is awesome and I can't wait to read more, hurry please, it's addicting! I also hope that this is not just leading up to their first time and that will be the end of the story...there seems like there is so much more to this relationship... anyways great story, definitely keep writing!! :-D
That was a great third chapter that you wrote. I can hardly wait for the next chapter to see what you do with Robbie and the girls. It would be nice to see the relationship between Robbie and his stepsister Kris develop a little bit more into something. Also to see Robbie and Michelle finally get together.
Very awesome third chapter and I'm looking forward to seeing where this really will lead as I don't feel she has that much control to not take this further.
I find myself agreeing with Rich in SW Ohio. I'm hoping you develop this into a full blown sibling romance and a life-long love affair. We will see, won't we?
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Anonymous05/27/09
unrealistic
you got way to unrealistic with this chapter you are trying to rush things what happened in this chapter should have been spread out over several months not days please keep it realistic and believable if you fucked this early i don't think it's worth reading the rest typical of a male writer
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Anonymous10/28/09
agree
way to unrealistic no guy as shy and unsure of himself would ever have gone to the party to begin with and the part where he goes to his sisters room after the party no way he would have avoided her at all costs keep it atleast sounding realistic and stop trying to change human nature
Why not simply tell her the truth, that he went there to see if he could find her, and that he only went with Michelle since she came with Luke. If she really is interested in Rob she shouldn't have been with Luke... Me personally think Rob and Kris belong together, and I hope there wont be any angst in the rest of the chapters. :)
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Anonymous07/27/13
Beautiful letter
I thought you were leading up to a more romantically-inclined response from Rob. Oh well, I'm sure that will come to fruition in your later chapters. Can't wait.
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Please continue.
The pace with which your story is progressing is great, though I'm sure there are others that may not agree,since some like a fast paced story. Looking forward to the next and future installments. Keep up the great work!
I hope that the story isn't only about their first
I hope that the concept of the whole story isn't to just end on Robb and Kris getting together for a good fuck. There's a lot more to tell after that. The true long lasting love that they could share, moving out of mom and dad's place into a place of their own. Kris becoming pregnant, and the couple telling everyone that they are going to be married. The story is really good and has a lot of life to be told yet. Thanks......Rich
Really enjoying this one.
If I'm the brother reading that letter, I'm thinking of telling the sister about our third option: We cut the bullshit. We don't need the others there, just to keep us "safe" from each other. We're going to do what we want to do, period. I don't want them, I want you, and you feel the same way about me. If you want to include them, fine, we'll all have at it, but we both know where this is going so let's shitcan the idea of using your friends as human shields. It's time to lose the artificial constraints.
If you insist on having them there with us, great. Let them watch us make love, because that's what we're going to do, whether they're there or not.
Know that, sis.
Great story so far.
EXCELLENT
I agree...most people do like a fast paced story. However, I think this one is awesome and I can't wait to read more, hurry please, it's addicting! I also hope that this is not just leading up to their first time and that will be the end of the story...there seems like there is so much more to this relationship... anyways great story, definitely keep writing!! :-D
Great Third Chapter!!!
That was a great third chapter that you wrote. I can hardly wait for the next chapter to see what you do with Robbie and the girls. It would be nice to see the relationship between Robbie and his stepsister Kris develop a little bit more into something. Also to see Robbie and Michelle finally get together.
YAY!!!
Oh my god im loveing this story so far. Cant wait for the next chapter and hopefully for more beyond that.
Awesome thidr chapter
Very awesome third chapter and I'm looking forward to seeing where this really will lead as I don't feel she has that much control to not take this further.
Again...
I find myself agreeing with Rich in SW Ohio. I'm hoping you develop this into a full blown sibling romance and a life-long love affair. We will see, won't we?
unrealistic
you got way to unrealistic with this chapter you are trying to rush things what happened in this chapter should have been spread out over several months not days please keep it realistic and believable if you fucked this early i don't think it's worth reading the rest typical of a male writer
agree
way to unrealistic no guy as shy and unsure of himself would ever have gone to the party to begin with and the part where he goes to his sisters room after the party no way he would have avoided her at all costs keep it atleast sounding realistic and stop trying to change human nature
Why not simply tell her the truth, that he went there to see if he could find her, and that he only went with Michelle since she came with Luke. If she really is interested in Rob she shouldn't have been with Luke... Me personally think Rob and Kris belong together, and I hope there wont be any angst in the rest of the chapters. :)
Beautiful letter
I thought you were leading up to a more romantically-inclined response from Rob. Oh well, I'm sure that will come to fruition in your later chapters. Can't wait.
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