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im likin this a...
LOT!!! thanx for the speedy update and the story is bubblin just fine!!!
Riveting
I love the story thus far....loved the inclusion of the vision from Maria as well.
Entertaining
I like how the story is developing; and most of all I love that you post each part so soon after the other. It's become a ritual for me these past few days to come home from work and catch up on Rayne's adventures :)
Another Great Chapter!!
Those another great chapter that you wrote about Rayne. I like how you are introduced Gabriela into the story and made her part of the story and parts three and four. I like how Ryane's friend was able to give his emotions under control and marry Veronica. I can hardly wait for the next chapter.
Where's the rest?
I figured you were just re-editing since it had been left for so long. If I remember correctly you had a couple of chapters already written. Have you completed the story now and are polishing? I really hope you finish it this time, as it was really disappointing to see it left for so long. Good luck with it and I hope to see more chapters soon.
An entertaining story, until
the historical inaccuracies spoiled it. Fifteenth century and people traveling leisurely up and down to Tahiti? Or did I miss the fantasy tag and Gabriela is over 300 years old?
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