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Not that great...
While the editing is good, in general, the story isn't. This is basically bad erotica that wants to be a legit story, but isn't. I mean, honestly, why would the women, and Kyle, strip off all their clothes so readily, and in front of strangers to boot? It is human nature to wear clothes, unless a person happens to be a nudist. And then there's Cindy. Not only does she not give a damn about her boyfriend Kyle staring at all the naked ladies, human or not, but she actually encourages him to fuck them as he sees fit. That would be the perfect relationship for any guy, but it sure as hell doesn't fit with what happens in real life.
too short
I liked this Ch. but, it was just way too short. looking foward to the next chapter. keep up the good work
A ship too far
A alien ship at his command. Check. The ship is full of naked female androids. Hmm, ok. Your girlfriend is cool with that. I am starting to have my doubts. She brings along her bi girlfriend a set of Asian twins? Dude? They all get naked and start having sex. Too much.
Kyle has no buds he wants to turn on this sweet ride?
I know I am asking a lot for believability on this site, but I would settle for plausible. If his girlfriend and her friends turn out to be androids sent to recruit him I would find it believable.
Just too much.
As an early writer said a lot like Mr. Marvel' Genesis Project.
Where is the creativity?
I am very disappointed with this chapter. Aside from its brevity, it appears to indicate that this story has run out of steam.
Work In Progrss
Nice chapter, I was a little disappointed with Cindy's surprise. Kyle has a ship full of naked female robots, so two human twins was somewhat of a let down. I was also a little confused with Kyle attitude of worrying about his girlfriend catching him in bed with two robots. She has already previously gotten naked before leaving so, one would think she would be cool with him experimenting with mechanical devices. I look forward to more adventure in future chapters. I hope to see some sort of conflict or challenge that Kyle or Cindy must face so that life on the ship is not so perfect.
Where's the imagination?
OK, on a ship that can go anywhere, with 700+ female androids which look [and feel, and smell, and taste?] like human females, who are naked all the time and receptive to sex on demand, and 1, no 2, no 4 human females, who are [gasp!] ALL bisexual, and when they finally get around to having sex it's not as explicit as the womens' romance novels. The SciFi has run dry, and the erotica never got started. Sorry, but the author needs to develop creativity.
wow
great chapter :D
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