by greystardust
This story has a good base to it I hope you will continue. Might I suggest that you make her submissive to the daughter and play it out with the father catching them making it a very happy family? Otherwise as some of the other poster hinted to it would suck!
i liked the way it developed and the encounter changed as her tone did
I think the story plot everything great and I laughed at the end !!! VERY GOOD !!! thanks again smco22000@aol.com Carmella