All Comments on 'Persephome's Humiliation Ch. 02'

the first chapter was okay, and the second one started out alright. but by the second half of the first chapter the typos and errors just went nuts. not that it's not a good story, because it is. you just really need to edit more.

This story, at least so far, is really gorgeous. You have really found a nice balance between imagery-rich story line and full-on physical description. It feels rather timeless, actually. It seems like it could take place in the early 1900s, the 1950s, or even in modern times.