Makes no differance, sister or not, to abandon ones own children is not right, no matter what the reason, thats why just 75.
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Anonymous05/10/09
Real
i can understand why he did what he did.....this was a very different Kayleigh compared to the first chapter, and the things she did with her friend behind his back was called "cheating", and the way she lied to him about how they met was the first step to betrayal. He truly did loved her but she was just too curious for the good of their relationship....threesome or not, a cheating lover is a cheating lover.....i felt sorry for the guy, though i can't say the same for Kayleigh. Overall, good writing and it felt powerfully real, 100% from me.
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Anonymous05/11/09
Well done,
The tone in each of these two parts was very different. The first hot, the second just sad but both were very good. The main character felt his sister was after breaking more sexual taboos so perhaps he was better off in the long run. Still its a shame he didnt be a father to his children. It would be interesting to see how they discover the truth, because I can only imagine they eventualy would.
As the author of both Keyleigh stories I find myself in unfamiliar territory here. I’m actually having to defend my work. I realize that you the reader have a right to comment on any story posted on this site which is why we leave the comment boxes open. I’m used to being told some of my stories are crap and some are ok. Attack me for putting a comer in the wrong place or misspelling a word. If you’re sad enough to feel the need to do that then feel free. I do however object to the vile and disgusting comments that get sent anonymously to my e-mail addey because the story didn’t end the way you wanted it to. If you the reader of this story have taken the time to read both stories, then firstly I thank you. Then I will ask you to put your hand on you’re heart and tell me that if you believe that if I finished this story any other way, do you think that there would be someone out there that would want it to finish another way? Both stories are set five years apart, I know I and my opinions were different from five years ago so don’t you think I had to reflect that in this story? The third and final part of this story is set when the twins are now eighteen. Do you think the characters in this story will still have the same attitudes? Feel free to comment on these stories, but please be constructive, without that us authors will simply write what we know and/or feel. To those who are indignant that I killed Keyleigh off then stand up and send me your e-mail addy and I will explain to the best of my ability why. No one can win a one sided argument.
The story leads me in circles. The same logic that condemns him for abandoning his girls then had to wrestle with his judgmental self-righteousness of Mandy and his supposed one true love.
I think the most powerful thing about this story is how true it is to the main character.
It's not about what we as readers want or think, but a loyal testament to how one man dealt with betrayal in the midst of ultimate loss.
Regardless of my disappointment, the characters are really well written, and I will definitely be reading more of your work!
Jason
Why did she have to die. The other woman was unnecessary. I believe you don't understand the love between siblings and think its wrong but it isn't. Don't do any more incest till you realise what they have to go thru without every tom dick or harry thrown in to break them up.
Oh man, that sucked! Dammit, I KNEW I should have stopped reading as soon as she died! Damn. I gotta say, that guy was kind of an asshat from beginning to end, I'd have felt better if it had to be a shitty ending that she had lived, ditched him, moved in with her gf and the girls and he went off to be a miserable guy. Hell, he barely even sees the girls, damn! So he just gives them up to the fucked up parents to raise? Did he learn nothing?! Lol. ....well enjoyed the story for a while anyway. First chapter. I cant bring myself to read the third one:/
English
Sad
Makes no differance, sister or not, to abandon ones own children is not right, no matter what the reason, thats why just 75.
Real
i can understand why he did what he did.....this was a very different Kayleigh compared to the first chapter, and the things she did with her friend behind his back was called "cheating", and the way she lied to him about how they met was the first step to betrayal. He truly did loved her but she was just too curious for the good of their relationship....threesome or not, a cheating lover is a cheating lover.....i felt sorry for the guy, though i can't say the same for Kayleigh. Overall, good writing and it felt powerfully real, 100% from me.
Well done,
The tone in each of these two parts was very different. The first hot, the second just sad but both were very good. The main character felt his sister was after breaking more sexual taboos so perhaps he was better off in the long run. Still its a shame he didnt be a father to his children. It would be interesting to see how they discover the truth, because I can only imagine they eventualy would.
From the author.
As the author of both Keyleigh stories I find myself in unfamiliar territory here. I’m actually having to defend my work. I realize that you the reader have a right to comment on any story posted on this site which is why we leave the comment boxes open. I’m used to being told some of my stories are crap and some are ok. Attack me for putting a comer in the wrong place or misspelling a word. If you’re sad enough to feel the need to do that then feel free. I do however object to the vile and disgusting comments that get sent anonymously to my e-mail addey because the story didn’t end the way you wanted it to. If you the reader of this story have taken the time to read both stories, then firstly I thank you. Then I will ask you to put your hand on you’re heart and tell me that if you believe that if I finished this story any other way, do you think that there would be someone out there that would want it to finish another way? Both stories are set five years apart, I know I and my opinions were different from five years ago so don’t you think I had to reflect that in this story? The third and final part of this story is set when the twins are now eighteen. Do you think the characters in this story will still have the same attitudes? Feel free to comment on these stories, but please be constructive, without that us authors will simply write what we know and/or feel. To those who are indignant that I killed Keyleigh off then stand up and send me your e-mail addy and I will explain to the best of my ability why. No one can win a one sided argument.
Such a sad tale!
Not all good stories are happy ones.
Conflicted
The story leads me in circles. The same logic that condemns him for abandoning his girls then had to wrestle with his judgmental self-righteousness of Mandy and his supposed one true love.
I think the most powerful thing about this story is how true it is to the main character.
It's not about what we as readers want or think, but a loyal testament to how one man dealt with betrayal in the midst of ultimate loss.
Regardless of my disappointment, the characters are really well written, and I will definitely be reading more of your work!
Jason
Not too sure about this one....!
Liked the premise until the sour ending. Almost totally ruined the story for me.
Why
Why did she have to die. The other woman was unnecessary. I believe you don't understand the love between siblings and think its wrong but it isn't. Don't do any more incest till you realise what they have to go thru without every tom dick or harry thrown in to break them up.
Oh man, that sucked! Dammit, I KNEW I should have stopped reading as soon as she died! Damn. I gotta say, that guy was kind of an asshat from beginning to end, I'd have felt better if it had to be a shitty ending that she had lived, ditched him, moved in with her gf and the girls and he went off to be a miserable guy. Hell, he barely even sees the girls, damn! So he just gives them up to the fucked up parents to raise? Did he learn nothing?! Lol. ....well enjoyed the story for a while anyway. First chapter. I cant bring myself to read the third one:/
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